I see

Look at me what do you see?

I see a girl who's scared in the world.

You see a girl unwilling to change

I see someone who's scared and alone

You see someone who's a bit odd

I see a woman who want's her voice known

You see a young girl who's a know it all.

I see a girl with a crooked smile

You see a girl who's not worth it

I see a girl trying to fit in

You see someone who won't ever make it

 

Reviews

[reflectingus]

This is a great poem. I love how you have switched views, about how you see yourself, and how others see you. I think that's what makes this poem unique. Also, I enjoyed reading the poem, it flowed so easily. I also like how you have used simple words, so the message is easily put across, and I can make a clear contrast between what you think, and what others think. Honestly, I would've loved it if the poem was longer, perhaps a bit more detailed, but yeah, that's just because I want more of this awesomeness. :P

There are times in life when I also wonder about the world, what people may think, and most of the time, that brings down my self-esteem. But then I realise that you shouldn't really care what others think, and when I feel that kind of insecurity, I get determined to prove them wrong. So yeah, I love this poem because I can relate to it :) Great job overall!

[Vic]

Wow, just wow! I needed to read this poem twice! This is very powerful, a voice about a girl's frustrations about being accepted in the world and growing up. Something anyone and everyone can relate to and you've captured it well with very few words. Excellent.

[Igor G. Balatsky]

And I see a birdy who’s learning to fly.
Her wings are beautiful as well as her smile.
May your flights be light-winged and inspired! :)

[Jibey]

Seems like the conflicting views of parents and a teenager... Nicely done..

Btw .. 'a woman who wants' (no 's, as no abbreviation and no possession)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice one, I like the different views in this within each line. :)

[Mark D]

Hey

I really enjoyed this. Very interesting and conveys a lot of feeling.

Well done

[Sunflower]

i like this poem