Tinted Glass

We observe a world through tinted glass

It has grown darker in times that pass

Smeared by hate, warped by fires

Which incinerate love and carnal desires 

My glass is shattered, broken by pain 

Misery, deceit and selfish gain 

Like crystal garlands of a chandelier

They reflect and echo my torment and fear

Lo! fetched a hammer so I may break this guise

And let honest winds scour my eyes

These fleshy jelly have long since been blind 

By this translucent wall between life and mind

-- -- --

I break the pane which relinquishes to me

The boundless world and naked sea.

 

Reviews

[Lisa Ring]

You have observed much in your 18 years. It have taken me nearly 45 and I am still chipping away at the glass. Profound and lovely.

[Pól]

This is great, really. Best poem of this style I have seen. Congrats James

[Transience]

great write.the thought is beautiful and the rendition is blunt yet aesthetic all the same.
the last line of the 1st stanza is a bit confusing,as ufo has mentioned.everything else felt really touching.i loved the "jelly" expression for eyes.kudos...

[Lily Mae]

I have to be honest.. this is one of the best I've read in a long time.. It's probably because of where my heart and soul is at right now...but it speaks volumes to me.. I really ... really love this..xo Last line... seals the deal..x

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Great poem, James! A world, smeared by hate and warped by fires. Those same fires incinerate the love - but, do they incinerate the carnal desires or is the love replaced by carnal desire because of the hate and fire? You have a glass (innocence?) that was broken when you suffered pain and misery brought on by deciet and selfish gain. I am wondering if you stare at yourself in the crystal garlands and in so doing reflect upon your torment and fear? But, you don't like to reflect or it's too painful so you take the hammer and seek to break the focus of this painful reflection. Then you turn around and break the tinted glass that reveals the boundless world and naked sea. Out there are new beginnings that will/may help you mitigate and heal the pain. I sincerely hope so. Nicely done.

[koty bell]

gotta agree with h talat great write man

[Anonymous Girl]

Painful but hopeful. An amazing piece of work. ^.^

[James McFadyen]

Thank you ever so much. I am joyful that you are able to discover ambiguity and realise the non linear messages underneath a poem written in structured verse.

I am glad you have found enjoyment

[Anonymous Girl]

I am glad to read it ^.^

[John Alexander McFadyen]

James this is painful, profound but hopeful. A wonderfully describe piece and I know you will use its learning. Dadx