Three Words

Three Words

A Poem by ..R.I.P..

I saw the tears before they came

I felt the scream before it escaped

I heard the words before you spoke them

I knew in that instant that the walls were down

Our defenses crumbled away

We were tied together

In that instant

When every guard we had was gone

I saw the tears before they came

I felt the scream before it escaped

I heard the words before you spoke them

Three words were all it took

Three words unarmed both of us

...Three words...

...I love you...

© 2009 ..R.I.P..


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Very open. I kind of read this as a song.

"I saw the tears before they came
I felt the scream before it escaped
I heard the words before you spoke them"

Thise lines that you repeated were what made the poem.
You expressed the vunrability of feeling those things very well.
And opening up.
Great write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


to hear the words before they are spoken, is to know the emotion before it ts surrendered to desire,
when the walls crumble the heart is open to the world and all it has to offer, if the world is seen in the eyes of another, then the words will eventually follow, this is beautifully written and has a heartfully
projected scope of romance that subtlely hovers like a teardrop before it falls, wonderful job janik
your talent is seen wide and clear. convincing and well polished in form.

Posted 12 Years Ago


two thumbs up, really.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This would read well as the chorus to a song. I think out of all the pieces I've read, this is probably the strongest. One note: "tied together".

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderful and sweet
great write and well expressed.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...................

Two people come to my mind...

The one that loved me but I didn't love him...
...and the one that I loved but he didn't love me.

*starts crying again, just when I was about to stop!!*

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love it.....it's a gr8 poem baby and i love you too so much more than anything

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your right this one is very strong. The build up is great. I like the way that you see love,its as thow you see it as a storm or a destructive force. Very strong work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree it all built up to the end =D

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Wow, great build-up, grammar, and set-up. I loved it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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