Window Seat

sorry aisle seat you're too boring to deserve your own poem

Rays of light swimming in pairs along the

Rails at night through the window I sail by

say "Goodnight" as the moon watches me lean into her scene...

Reviews

[Rev Edward McClelland]

Have you ever read Irish poet Francis Ledwidge ?

[Jargyn]

no actually but at your mention I just read a few of his poems and they're very nice. So far I think my favorite one was "A little boy in the morning," even though it was like one of the first ones I read it just stuck because of the imagery. Thank you for mentioning him, is there a reason you brought him up?

[Rev Edward McClelland]

Actually he came to mind when I was reading one of your poems. I am no expert but I think that you have a similar style. https://en.wikisource.org/wiki/The_Complete_Poems_of_Francis_Ledwidge

[Jargyn]

Ah that's such an cool website it correlates each poem to where he was when he wrote them!
read moreAh that's such an cool website it correlates each poem to where he was when he wrote them!

Yes comparing his poem to this one I notice we follow a similar rhythm, also just the way he describes imagery is very nice and just acknowledges interesting relationships, for example in the poem I mentioned "A little boy in the morning" a line that stuck with me was "he whistles at another gate," which creates the image of the boy waiting at the gates to the afterlife while also keeping the sadness in the boy's lost characteristics now living on somewhere else. That is an aspect in poetry I have noticed that I try to replicate because it leans into a more imaginative and rich side of metaphors that I just love a lot. So maybe that could be something you saw similar, because if it was that would be great to know I was able to capture it! But even then just on the surface I can see how his poems follow a similar rhythm as this one.

Thank you for making that connection, I don't actually have much knowledge about poetry or even books frankly but I've been trying to build up a general idea of what has been made so any suggested writings I am always very excited to hear about.

[Rev Edward McClelland]

Yes it is. Also there is a musician who put a lot of his work to music. Sean Tryell. Sean passed away a few months ago, but I saw him years ago in a performance in Rhode Island.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This is cool, writing a poem about a seat full of imagery. tyfs

[Jargyn]

thanks man it was really fun to conceive, glad to hear others enjoyed it as well :)