Terra Infirma

Terra Infirma

A Poem by J
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Here you go, Ivy... a repost of my old featured which I'll feature again, what the hell. You did ask, haha. Redone Evoca track. The track down the bottom is mixed with a little ditty I was making up at the time on a nylon acoustic. Terrible quality. Yup.

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The earth can seem too deep at times,
as boulders rush over gravel and termites
lay eggs in fields of promises; blooms

of violence cut back with rusty secateurs
under a moon-song of rivers drying up
in their featherdown beds.


We've all grown... some in the most
flagrant ways harpooned upon a beach,
some like Reznor's downward spiral

into oblivion: for that first urge making
you throw your fingers wide to write
of all the troubles in your prismatic life.


Stanzaic: there's order amongst the revival
of fallen gypsy castles, tidal-blown under
the restraints of etiquette, familiarity

and soul sacrifice; emblazing inky notions
to the sidewalks, we write our own epitaphs
for others to wander/wonder over.


And this is
just how I want it.




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© 2008 J


Author's Note

J
Shitty guitar, I know. I stuff around now, that's pretty much it.
Photo of a cool waterfall/open cave at a beach near where I live.
Yep, I like the whole audio-visual-written palette, I guess.

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I thought I'd already reviewied this one but evidently not! This is a terrific bit of work - very organic. There's also something vaguely sci-fi about your imagery: eggs in fields, downward spirals and prismatic life. It conjurs a War of the Worlds kind of scenario, though perhaps that's just my imagination.

Posted 17 Years Ago


26 of 27 people found this review constructive.




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five years, gosh, time flies doesn't it?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like what james said. very organic. my creative writing professor has been talking about organic form a lot with me. this piece definitely had it. it flowed beautifully. thanks for writing it!

-doug-

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such vivid and contemplative imagery you have evoked in this piece. Great work. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jase, could you write me a pm so we can get back in contact? The site is finally going live;) I'd love your company there!

Ivy

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good poem along the the picture.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I listened to this twice. I'm taken aback by the depth and flow to it- makes me feel as if I'm standing in the middle of a barren wasteland with the wind whispering secrets to me while a lizard wraps its tail round my ankle. Just like that.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i thought that was beautiful! i completely agree with Janes Plater. it was had a organic and sci-fi feel to it. i loved the guitar, the tune fits perfectly with the poem. once you started playing the guitar i could picture you sitting there on a stage with the spotlight on you, reading your poem and lightly strumming your guitar. what a brilliant piece!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved the guitar and hearing you read the poem. I could feel the notes like a lite rain falling on my skin....don't we tho? Write our own epitaphs for others to wander/wonder over? Lovely and real.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Audio-visual-written palette! It's very much appreciated and thoroughly enjoyed.

You have really captured that fleeting feeling of what it means to be a human. It can often be forgotten in Urban Jungles. It's an eloquent and authoritative poem. Whenever I read something that I TRULY regard highly, a review seems almost ridiculous.

Good doesn't cut it, so as I am struggling around my garden, trying to find better words, I find myself becoming more inarticulate.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hey!
Its really strange, because this poem expresses exactly how I was feeling earlier today sat writing in a windy field, and its amazing when someone explains you to yourself like that. Incredibly rich imagery, and your choice of language manages to be raw and unforgiving whilst really beautiful.
And you also have awesome music taste =)


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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