Drywall

 

I’ve pressed myself up to

the drywall between us.

My cheeks and palms and breasts,

hoping my desires will seep

through and send a sign,

 

“APARTMENT J IS IN LOVE”

 

or something like that.

 

It can’t be that thick,

the drywall,

because I can always hear the sounds

of you through it

 

(I love it when

you think no one is listening

and you sing along to Shania Twain.

Don’t worry, I love your baritone)

 

I’ve thought of knocking on your door

in my bathrobe

and asking for a cup of sugar

or an afternoon of sex.

 

But I thought,

who needs sugar in a bathrobe?

And, what would happen if you said yes?

 

Would we knock down the

Drywall?

Then what would I hang my pictures on?

Reviews

[Tim McGovern]

Reminds me of the song " Living Room" by Tegan and Sara
This piece has a maturity about it that suggests you know it's all a game, an infatuation.
It's playful, has the feeling of a daydream, and moves along extremely well.
Your ending, as with so many of your poems, wraps it up nicely.

thank you
Namaste'
Tim

[fireblossom]

Sweet aunt doris that's a fine piece. No not you, jeez. The poem. The young woman blooming pressed against the drywall...omg what a vision.

so well written - pithy - funny - sexy and intimate...what would i hang my pictures on? love it.

[Rain]

What a great original piece on love, and drywall. :) I will never see drywall the same. Now, it has the traits of all the little things that keep love/lust from happening. Some great lines in this. I loved it. Rain..

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I love this - I am laughing at the mere thought of this.... I have a neighbor that I see in the hall and I am always doing something I feel like I should explain! He did even catch me singing the other morning as I was scrapping off my car.... This is too fun! My favorite line - who needs sugar in a robe? I laughed right out loud. This has to go in my favorites so I can refer to it and maybe I will get the nerve to knock on my neighbor's door and then WE will have something to explain.... love it.

[Jess: ~The Sidekick~]

I really like this also. I have to agree with Dawn's stance on this.

[Dawn Jones]

I really like this. Something about that wall between the urning and the human presence you capture in your words brings it to life and makes the reader really feel what you are saying.

[An Ordinary Woman]

This is really adorable, I like your 'tongue in cheek' voice which holds through out your poem, making it fun and delightful to read.

I bet many of us can relate, too. I know I can. Thats part of what makes it so sweet. Ugh, I haven't any neighbors anymore that are that close, but I can remember back in the day .... *smiles

I really enjoyed it a lot.