Bloom

 

 

 

 

 

She'd just moved in...

Outside- beside her chipped paint porch, was a tiny pond.
The weekend was here and so she decided to clean it.

Upon removing the last bit of algae, she found a dying lotus.
It was barely recognizable as such, but she knew it was.

She touched its delicate, slumping green arms and spoke.
Her tone was ever so gentle, just enough to let the flower know she was there and... that she cared.

Every morning and night, she was found by the pond side,
singing, praying and nurturing her lost bud, floating.

One day, during her daily ritual of visiting the water,
she saw a blur of color emerging at the surface.

It was bright yellow and stunning from arm to head.
Her lotus flower was alive and well, smiling, the way she did

for it, even in its most repelling appearances and times.
Every day now, the lotus honors her too, greeting sun and moon.

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I talk to my plants, after all they are alive..
I love this ,, it shows love and tanacity.. and a woman who is very compassionate..
And in the end we see the Lotus appreciated it.
To me this could also be about our relationships with people.. nuture and love and recieve it in return.

Chloe
xoxo

[Alex]

:) much needed warmth in in my cold rite now -thank you so much for sharing .
a soft and sweet piece :)

[The Poor Man's Poet]

Some how I feel a Hai-ku coming on
this is a beautiful poem, and you paint good picture too.
I really enjoyed this piece.

The Poor Man's Poet.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I want to say "awwww", but that wouldn't be giving you a good review....*L*

I dig on the style of the poem...a story, wrapped up nicely as stanzas. Lotus flowers are really cool, and the idea of nursing a flower back to health is rather novel.
Thanks for letting me read this....and the picture went with it perfectly!

[Susan Anita dellinger]

Nice poem Jenny, raw talent always touches me

[James Watts]

This was very nice and had a lot of heart behind it. Your words were well chosen and the emotion in those words were compelling.

[Lionel Braud]

what a compassionate poem, this speaks well about the tenacity of life, those things which we render hopeless are ugly if we give them a chance they grow.

[Stacy A. Foster]

Nice, like a sweet reflection in the pond. This is cheerful and teaches a good lesson about taking care of others in need (unconditionally). It's a story that could be read to children as well.

It was bright yellow and stunning from arm to head.
Her lotus flower was alive and well, smiling, the way she did

Very sweet,
Stacy

[Gandré]

Jenny darling you are so wonderful. I love your mind!!! so sad, I felt like crying.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

The movement ofthis piece was Great as well as the The love hidden in eachof the lines. Awesome write.
A well written and thought out piece.
Debby