NeuroTypical

A Prose describing the feeling of hiding in another skin and finally coming to accept that feeling is a part of yourself.

Somewhere deep beneath my disguise

under the smiles, jokes and the lies

there’s something else

something with charm.

Someone with the confidence, 

to do you all harm 

Yet I am willing,

to throw my mask to the wind

to give myself up and let it be free,

because I can’t breathe,

because I can’t see,

Because when you destroy me,

I fall to my knees.

When I am up late, on fiery nights,

When my eyes start to gleam,

and my soul stretches tight.

The patches begin to tear at the seams,

What’s hidden reveals itself,

in my heated screams

My mind begs to take leave

as I am left broken and slain.

That is when the lining tore through

When I accepted defeat,

My sanity began to fade,

and I fell to my knees before you.

I gave my soul, in trade for a sin,

as light faded to darkness,

I allowed shadow in

and I sold what I knew,

With nothing else I could do

down on my knees 

I gave into you. 

Author's Note

Anything and Everything would be helpful; grammar, beat, anything. I respect critique but not put downs.

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

Earthshaking poem: here is my versified response criticism:

You fell on your knees before the being
You be with the being because you're seeing;

You jive with the planets, the meadows, the stars;
You don't have to worry about too many cars

The mask has caught in the virulent wind
The façade had made you seem to have sinned!

[FJS98]

I think it was great! My only critique is that the rhyming scheme comes and goes somewhat randomly.Aside from that I think if was wonderful. Keep up the work!