"That Should Have Been Me!"

If my longing starts to increase

And my life becomes a broken piece

I’ll wait for You with a quiet heart

I’ll rest in Your presence for You’ll never depart

 

Your glory fills the celestial sky

Day by day and night by night

Glimmering stars, smiling moon

Sunset from heaven, beauty that blooms

 

You’re love beckons me

Your precious blood set me free

Your fragile body hung on a tree

“Why?” they ask

“That should have been me!”

 

But you didn’t want to see me die

So you took my blame and paid my fine

That’s when your love came down for all mankind

And we watched you suffer as we said goodbye

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

lifts my heart ... the irregular rhyming and added line in V3 lean this towards free verse but you kept the strength of quatrains and aabb in V1&2 then loosen it up a bit ... i like it ... the strong theme of Faith and its value in hardships overrides everything else ... i am blessed and comforted as i read .. your closing two lines i especially like ... not many think that when Jesus Christ died on the cross He said goodbye to the world and our wonderful Holy Spirit descended ..really like that stuff! thanks for sharing ..a fine way to begin my day this morning
E.