Love Me Not

all the reasons to walk away forever...

love me not
for I am through
through with ever
needing you

love me not
for I am gone
away with every
angry song

love me not
for it is late
and all the while
you make me wait

love me not
for it is true
I have aged
from loving you

love me not
for it is sad
to have lost
all that we had

love me not
for there is none
who kills my hope
like you have done

love me not
for it is fair
love and war
plays dirty there

love me not
for it is time
to move onto
another rhyme

Author's Note

just rambled it off at 3 am to stretch the verbal angst muscle and get some of it OUT

Reviews

[Tea And A Cheshire Smil..]

I like this, although I think you could improve it by scrapping a stanza or two. Some of them sounded as though the rhyme was forced which really took away from the poem.

"love me not
for it is enough
to try and breathe
and get over stuff"

"love me not
for I have got
to get a life
or smoke some pot"

Those two really stuck out to me :/ they just didn't seem to fit in with the rest - it was almost as if they weren't serious whereas the rest of the poem was. But, as you said, this was just something you rambled off at 3am so, taking the time of night and the purpose behind your writing it into account, it's actually rather good all things considered.

The only other thing I would suggest is that you proof-read your work :) There were a few silly mistakes, for instance, where you put "though" instead of "through".

Over all, a brilliant poem with a great flow to it but it could be improved ^^ And welcome to Writers Cafe!

[deeps]

love me not
for it is time
to move onto
another rhyme

Love this part. Here.
This is a wonderful write.

[Bubo]

Walking away does not mean you cannot be loved, for there is always love in the world, some people just don't deserve your love. Well written and some good emotions, I'd leave out the "pot" stanza as it does not fit with all the other emotions.

[LittleMadGirl]

pretty nice work
the flow/rhythm seem sometimes a bit wrecked and the whole poem seems a bit longish 8I'd leve out soem stanzas) but I think it's still great work