Light Like Love

Like the moon that glows

On how you made my heart glows

Like the stars that sparkle

On how you made my eyes sparkle

 

It’s the feeling of being enlightened

Being lighted up from the dark

Someone who’ll makes everything bright

Even in my darkest night

 

It’s the feeling of being urged to wake up everyday

Like the sunlight that shine on my face

Oh how you give a smile on my face

Now all my loneliness is without a trace

 

Like the sun that gives energy

On how you make me feel happy

Like the sun that gives heat

On how you give warmth to my coldest of days

 

It’s a feeling that glows

It’s the feeling of being in love

A special feeling for someone that is so pure,

That is light like love.

...................

Jas A. Ramos

Arayat,Pampanga,Philippines

[email protected]

Reviews

[Legion]

Understand the feelings. Been there myself. The poem itself needs a bit of a rewrite in quite a few places (for example - the first two lines). Perhaps some more depth to it all. Read "On Writing Love Poems". It is a piece I wrote awhile back explaining what I mean here. You can make this mediocre or magnificient depending on the text and thought that you decide to use in the piece. Make it roar not whimper. It is refering to a love of the ages and how it would make one feel, so make the reader believe it whole-heartedly. Whatever you do, keep on writing. It will get there.

[DeViouS]

So warming:
`Like the sun that gives energy
On how you make me feel happy . . .
On how you give warmth to my coldest of days'

and `Like the stars that sparkle
On how you made my eyes sparkle'
Do you mean OH not ON?
Nice poem

[Brad]

wow! this sounds like a Van Morrison song, loved it

[Cynthia]

aw, thats so sweet! Its real, your description of love is very nice, and good!
Lots of staza can keep me smile when I read it,
and the closing staza is good as well!
Great!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

gorgeous! i love the line

It’s a feeling that glows
It’s the feeling of being in love

[Bella-Marie]

Very pretty. Many stanzas are made up of similes and I am a big fan of those so kudos to you! It's well-written, captivating and romantic. Ka Pai choice.

[Abd-afeez]

so emotional beautiful choice of words it is you used up. I enjoy d read thanks 4 sharing.

[Short.Nerd]

LOve it!! Amazing job!