If It’s For Real

If It’s For Real

You hug me,

You kiss me,

And you love me,

Everything that you do makes me happy

 

You are everything that is real

The warmth of your body when you hug me,

That when you hug me I hear the words I love you,

A hug that inspires my heart,

Inspires me that you will always be here in my life

 

All that I ever wanted is a life with you,

A lifetime loving you,

‘Cause loving you is what I dream off

A dream of true happiness

 

A true happiness that is with you now in this moment,

A moment when we’re lying in the same bed,

Together as one hugging each other,

This moment that I just want to be only the moment,

This moment that I just want to feel and struck my heart,

And if it is for real, I know it is with you.

 

Reviews

[Samantha J Wright]

The feelings you express in this poem are clearly delineated. The emotional candor is touching and conveyed in suitably consise language.
I would however suggest that if you condensed this poem even further and reduced the repetative phrases a little you would be left with an excellent piece of work.
I particularly like the lines, "You are everything that's real" and also "A dream of true happiness."
Good work and keep working with it until it's right.

[Daydreamer54]

qaw, tis is so sweet! Great write! ^^

[Hello, Goodbye]

solid stuff here

[What happened to simple..]

I actually really love this, not normally my cup of tea, but there's something just so simple and 'here it is, because I love you' about it. =) Thanks