Words ... epilogue

I noticed just the other day

when i turned my bluejeans  inside out

a curious little note left in my penny pocket

that flickered and glittered as it

fluttered to the floor . . .

 

there it lay

as insubstantial as minutes unused

     as untidy as my hands wound about one another

in fistfuls of counted heartbeats

                   marking time

                   marking mine

 

my fingers reached

      somewhere between ruffled ribbons of breath

            and the fullness of lips

to touch our nebulous link of too many imagined.imaginings

         unraveling, disintegrating with every degree

of tree spines bending

 

and along the way, i lost my own margins

and it came to hurt too much for me

to paint the sky with rhyming colours

as words slipped quietly into obscurity

Reviews

[A. Amos]

Something is unique and different about your writing as reading your work, as reader I feel myself in the world of peace and relaxation. Keep on writing your the best gift God is created for mankind to find shelter in your words, while truly enjoying the meaning of their existence. Just amazing...

[J]

and something is terribly special in your comments on my work, a. you are truly a literary friend. you make me feel as tho i can actually write. thank you.

[A. Amos]

You truly can my dear and you're most welcome

[Ladysue]

J. Every time I read your words, they seep into my soul and I am mesmerized. Beautifully written..

[J]

i can only thank you from my heart for your dear sentiments, sue. such inspiration one could only beg for ..... may even write again. xx

[Ladysue]

my pleasure..oh yes..write again..will be happy to come read..I just started writing again after a long break. xo

[Dean]

just discovered you. What a discovery!

[J]

more lovelies! thank you for coming to read :)

[SkinlessFrank]

jill, i have to agree with emma....this is like the full peach dripping with nectar

[J]

lovely :) thank you, frank

[Ed Hart]

i walked on that road and didn't know where i was going or where i had come from or how i got there....oh, may i have this dance

[J]

[grins] [curtsies] oh please . . . hold on, love. tis going to be a wild ride :)

[Oblivion]

"somewhere between ruffled ribbons of breath",

Just beautiful. The words and images are scattered but paint the picture so well. I feel your heart in this write, wonderful.

[J]

thank you, poet, for your most encouraging words! and "scattered." yup. that's exactly how my mind works! :)

[Oblivion]

That was meant as a compliment, honest, lol. The metaphors are complex and beautiful all at the same time.

[J]

oh haha thank you! i didn't take offense at all -- i thought how astute of you to pick up on the evidence of my undisciplined mind! [laughing]

[Oblivion]

But there appears to be a method to your madness. :)

[Ken Simm.]

There are too many parts of this that I like for me to pick out one. Suffice it to say itis a remarkable piece of I think healing words. And I don't think you have lost your margins. This piece proves it.

[J]

thank you for your generous comments, ken. your words are inspiring and bring a smile -- doesn't get any better than that. :)

[emmajoy]

Ohh Jilly Joyful, what gives you the right to make even a comma so beautiful, so meaningful?! Every time i read your poetry i sigh, whatever the content, however long or short, colour or finish. But this - this seems to me, has a veil across its meaning, a fading perspective that, dear friend, has to return at latest, by sweet Spring. Tis miss green.a.colour saying so.

[J]

dear girl, (((you))) tickle me no end with your compliments -- mostly i'm knocked backwards, and you've come to read me so well. how do i thank you for your generosity of time and thoughtfulness? yer just that kinda gal and i'm privileged to have you as my friend.

[.]

~ absolutely exquisite poetry... i'm moved to tears... the last stanza is particularly stunning but the entire narration is poignant beyond measure...

[J]

and how gracious of you to leave such a glowing comment! very sweet to have you come by. :) thank you!

[.]

~ you're very welcome... the privilege is all mine... :)