hands

fingers spread on open window frost

      waiting 

for

the cold goodbye 

 

one tiny finger

      held wobbly still

alights wings of iridescent

      shimmer

Colours

known only to God

 

small hands

        to hold.

Reviews

[Forest Green]

Delightful, chilly handprints illustrating the path to warmth and companionship.

Sometimes friends are inseperable, then other times good-bye seems to be hidden within each greeting.

Very nicely portrayed in verse and image-ination...

Daniel

[emmajoy]

A painting brought to life in such a few words. Beautiful. Memorable.

[J]

oh em, thank you dear friend ...... you've gone back a good while you have. smiling i yem

[T.C. Banks]

short and sweet yet amazingly complex.

[Mockingbird]

perhaps the child sits in the freezing car with the window down a little, and he's close to getting frostbite until the person saying goodbye to finally holds his hands. in the meantime, he sees all the lights and irredescent colors in that moment he shares with god.

[Gandré]

You do create deep feelings in your reader's heart. best Jill!

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

I like your style very much, it's like the jewel of many haikus pasted into a symphony of love's holding.

[Mark D]

Excellent, Really enjoyed this a lot. Thank you.

[PaperLife]

When you become famous and blow the minds of the rest of the world don't forget all of us little people here that treasured your writing first! :)

[Antonio Valentino]

emotion, existence, trapped in time.. miss holding my three son's hands as young children.. ..

innocence is trapped in there somewhere too

enjoyed this muchly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am deeply moved by this...and the awe of you! Wow, simply beautiful!


Kel

[patricia]

i loved this. Children are so in the moment, they have to touch everything and savour every moment. Their curiosity is wonderful. I loved.. one tiny finger held wobbly still alights wings of iridescent shimmer...I see you have kept your own childlike wonder, a great treasure. thankyou.