Neovu's Poem

A poem written by the young King of Lethoria before the fall of his city.

If you were a bird, I'll be your endless sky,
So no matter where you go, there will never be a goodbye,
Watching over you every day and covering you every night,
Painting you a fantasy, with clouds at a picturesque sight

If you were a fish, I'll be your sea,
An endless ocean, filled with so much serendipity,
Flowing with excitement, drifting with the breeze,
Lost in the horizon, where time chooses to cease

If you were a song, I'll be your melody,
The rhythm to my existence, the reason behind every key,
The lyrics of passion, defining the Love,
That you and I have shared and others have dreamed of

Author's Note

Please provide any criticisms so I can develop skills to successfully complete an unforgettable story line.

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

This is such a romantic and beautiful poem.

I liked the ending, "The lyrics of passion, defining the Love,
That you and I have shared and others have dreamed of.

Wonderful job!

[Q.]

Thanks for taking the time to read it :) and yes I do too lol

[Calissa Knox]

You're welcome. It was my pleasure!

[Sami Khalil]

"If you were a song, I'll be your melody,
The rhythm to my existence, the reason behind every key,
The lyrics of passion, defining the Love,
That you and I have shared and others have dreamed o"

Thank you king...I like it alot...Bravo

[Q.]

Hey thanks for taking the time to read it! And yes that line is -- I would say -- the best.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......................

[Ekai Stone]

i thought this feeling didn't exist until recently. this is from another poet so not much criticism needed. thank you!

[Q.]

You're welcome and thank you as well!

[AlyssaBC]

I really loved the flow of the poem. Made me all giddy inside.

[Q.]

I'm happy it did! Otherwise I wouldn't be doing something right lol thank you for taking the time to read this :)

[S C]

This was so sweet :) I greatly enjoyed reading this, and I look forward to seeing your other works. xo

[Q.]

Thanks ;) more will be posted soon!

[Stevo The POE-t]

Good job... Keep up the good work... I can't wait to see what's next from you... Thanks for sharing...

[Q.]

I Appreciate it my friend, thank you please don't hesitate to share this!

[BreannaAutumn]

Wow. Honestly that was perfection. Every line pulled me in more. The line ïf you were a bird I'd be your endless sky"somewhat reminded me of my favorite moment off my favorite movie: The Notebook! haha. What a poem! I'm sure you'll be very popular on this website. Woorahh:) thank you for sharing