Animal Instinct

Animal Instinct

A Poem by José Humilde
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Just up late...watching old re-runs of Law and Order. haha

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There goes the prey that I'm silently stalking.
I've gone hungry for far too long.
Pounce on her back lightening fast-almost shocking.
I have no remorse; I see nothing wrong.

I snapped her neck before she could make a sound.
Her sweet flesh was teasing my nose.
I made sure there was no trail so that we could be found.
Drove her home and ripped off her clothes.

She wasn't my first; definitely not my last.
I finished up with my tasty snack.
I compared her to others I've had in the past.
Licked my lips with a slurp and smack.

A noise at the door; somebody was knocking!
I opened the door with a bit of a quiver.
It was just the neighbor, "That's my car you are blocking!"
I backed up my truck and made plans for some dinner.

© 2010 José Humilde


Author's Note

José Humilde
So, I don't usually write like this, but I decided to give it a shot. Let know what ya think? Any and all feedback is welcome! I really suck at titles...so If you think of a good one, let me know. Thanks!! :D

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I like your style, makes you think a little... very good...I think i'll read another!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like how you flipped it very suprising and a little scary lol

Posted 14 Years Ago


ooo i like it!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


It is definetely an uncomfortable read! Don't know where you were going with it but you hit a 10 on my "creep O-meter"! Very effective.

Posted 14 Years Ago


You have a talent for rhyming :). I think that what this poem needs it a little more clue as to what this speaker is. Are you talking about a cannibal? You could use the title as the way to set this up somehow.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

creepy indeed! sounds more of a CSI crime wave! lol
thanks for entering my contest. "Snack Attack!"

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on May 21, 2010
Last Updated on May 25, 2010
Tags: killer, animal instinct, creepy, night, stalking, animal, thriller

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José Humilde
José Humilde

Pocatello, ID



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I'm a simple man with a complex mind. I was born and raised in southeastern Idaho, and wouldn't change a thing. I'm a young 21-year-old Chicano who has a deep understanding for his culture. I'm.. more..

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