To the woman who has my heart:

To the woman who has my heart:

A Poem by José Humilde
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At the risk of seeming sappy, I thought this up. Yeah...this is why I suck at free verse. :/

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You are what makes me feel.
You're the Sun to the daisy.
You're the Moon to the sea shore.
You're the breeze to the ladybug.
You are my everything.

© 2010 José Humilde


Author's Note

José Humilde
I'm not too confident in free verse. THis is a short poem...maybe when I can "find" the words, I will add more. Any and all feedback is welcome! :)

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Simple but affective. really good

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is really sweet hun. :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


You're the Sun to the daisy.
You're the Moon to the sea shore.
You're the breeze to the ladybug.

A very sweet and tender short verse ~ sun is to daisy
moon is to sea
perhaps better than ladybug >>>>>>> breeze is to trees



just my opinion here~enjoyed and thanks for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago


I'll review this line by line...

1) Wondrously eloquent! Line of the poem for me! Such a powerful beginning!
2) Lovely imagery and very very tender...
3) Ravishingly romantic! Beauty incarnate
4) Startlingly unconventional...never heard that said before! :)
5) Simple and obvious, but heartfelt...Emotions too overwhelming for complex words.. :)

Short, sweet, effective...Still a little unsure about the ladybug bit though... Do they really love the breeze? :)

Posted 11 Years Ago



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José Humilde
José Humilde

Pocatello, ID



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