My Love

this is a poem i wrote for a buddy, for his girlfriend. he said i should make it deep, but sweet. and this is whjat came out...

I was lost in a maze of temptation,

seeking comfort in every corner.

I struggled and fought the maze to completion,

then I found you, the Angel i mourned after.

My heart was lost, my eyes were blind,

before i met you, my true Love.

When I think of you, enchanting my mind,

you overflow my heart with passionate Love.

A rose between daisies,

you shine like a star.

Your beauty amazes all,

as it echoes so far.

I crave your embrace,

every moment we are parted.

Your heart warming smile,

enriched by your laughter.

Eternity's end is a very long time,

when days fall to dust and the sun will die,

To you my dear Angel i give you my all,

and love you always till the end of the world.

Author's Note

I am not fully contempt with everything in it, so i will edit when i get some new ideas.
but it was meant to "bring a tear to her eye, be sweet and also put a smile on her face" says my friend. so hope it did that...

Reviews

[Annique le Roux]

wow...what a favour for a friend :)
its great...that girl must be impressed

[Adelia Alighieri]

It's so sweet and so beautiful...
There are few people in your lives that make a difference...I am sure that the one you wrote this poem about, is one such person.
Brilliant piece.

[Elizabeth]

This is beautiful... well done.

[Ebs]

Awww. It's beautiful. I'm sure she will love it. Very Lovely written too. Congrats good poem


Ebs

[Haley Smith]

What an insanely sweet and romantic poem! I would love if I had a guy who were to write this for me! SOOO GREAT!

"A rose between daisies"

I especially love this part. She's set out amongst all the other girls. She's different and unique.

Hopefully you will show her this because I know if that were me I'd get all ridiculous and weak in the knees like a pansy (no pun intended).

[Servant Ties]

I LOVED IT!!!!! *glomps* it was amazing! good job

[~IlOvEcHrIsToPhErBuRnEt..]

im a girl and i know if my boyfriend wrote that for me id probaly cry. that is the sweetest thing ive heard in a while. i like the way your words are, i cant seem to make my words like that i just dont know why.