Crestfallen ( S**t Faced )

Touched by the blessing of being a failure

I'm delirious to the touch

I'm a precious dissatisfactory from above

 

That's why he sent me down here

to tread on the earth with a path of dissatisfaction to all that touches me

 

I have been crestfallen.

I waded through the feathers of fallen angels and never considered their pain

I never thought of looking into the cool blue water of your eyes

Never considering the currents that ran beneath

I sorrow in the fragrance of cherries and lilacs

I'm a dissatisfactory to all

All eyes on waves

Every wave is different but in the end they always come crashing down

Washing away the pretty shells and rocks that we wanted to be.

I have been crestfallen.

I cocked the gun took my aim, nothing came out but scribbles

 

Ive been touched with failure

the sweet fragrance of regret

Please Poseidon take me away?

 

If god doesn't want me, then you will be my new father

Let the waves

Claim me as your little mermaid

and take my feathers away.

 

 

Author's Note

EN-joy
;)

Reviews

[Just Plain Me]

I love this so much...I don't know how many times I've felt something like this, and not known how to explain it. You just feel like no matter what you do, you'll screw it up, so you question why you're even here. You want someone to hold you and tell you why you're here, and everything will be worked out in the end. The poem is incredible at describing that feeling. I'm kind of in love with this poem... lol

[Forest Green]

Amazing metaphors at work, absolutely compelling. Each line leads to an ending that is both complete and ultimately satisfying. Thoughful lyrics, stand alone portrayals of self-demarcations...lines in the shifting sands.

Very good work...

[Vital Signs 13]

I love this. So wonderfully written, your words really speak to me.

[Zeek4]

Good poem Lexi. If you have been "touched by failure" it wasn't demonstrated in this poem. Keep up the work.

[GioVonnie]

The ending was Great, I always look forward to a good closing. Nice Job.

[Jeff]

Wonderfully written.

[Brian Kraklau]

peaceful in a way lol

[Aven]

I liked the part about the water... "let the waves claim me"... fits perfectly with the mood...

[Kate Hunter]

good job. Very creative. I liked reading it.