A Blue, Blue Love

A Blue, Blue Love

A Poem by Jordan Easley

A mimic of "A Red Red Rose" by Robert Burns

An ocean is like a blue, blue love
Pale, cold, and seldom touched
An ocean is full of letting go
But I love you too much

You're beautiful, I love you and,
It's hard to just let go
I'll love you till the world is done,
Long as the rivers flow

Till this ocean dries up, I fear
That we can't go on like this
It's time to say good-bye to love
Your kisses I'll always miss

So take these words, take them well,
Lock them away in a bin
But this ocean sits before us
Let's hold our breath and jump in

© 2012 Jordan Easley

Author's Note

Jordan Easley
I wrote this as a mimic of "A Red, Red Rose" by Robert Burns. I give credit to him. What do you think?

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What a nice poem! It is so meaningful, so powerful! Great word choice and it is such a wonderful idea to write a poem about! Excellent write!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Nice write! Love the last stanza!

Posted 10 Years Ago

really nice meaning to it:) its cute:)

Posted 10 Years Ago

This was very good, I like it when writers challenge themselves to do something different and you succeeded.

Posted 10 Years Ago

I really like this, especially the first stanza. Very metaphoric, good piece!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Excellent. I can relate to this, the emotions are familiar to me. I loved it.

Posted 10 Years Ago

This is a good poem & flowed well. It was an interesting concept to work off of another poem. I had to go read the original because I was unfamiliar with it, but now that I have I can compare the two.

I think the original can lend a lot of it's success to the fact that it uses a lot of voice; the way it's written you can just hear what the speaker sounds like. Bits like "Till a’ the seas gang dry" and "sand o' life" give the reader a glimpse into the speaker's voice. This might be something to try next time. Also, Robert Burns uses repetition very effectively. Try writing the same line twice, with only minor tweaks, to emphasize something, as he does near the end.

Don't get me wrong though, this piece was well written and I liked your style. The message was powerful and delivered effectively. Well done, I look forward to seeing more of your work.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on July 12, 2012
Last Updated on July 12, 2012
Tags: Jordan, Easley, Poem, A, Blue, Love, Robert, Burns, Red, Rose, Ocean, Hurt, Loss


Jordan Easley
Jordan Easley

San Antonio, TX

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