i remeber...

it's about how someone cheated on someone with there best friend an lied

i remeber his touch
i remeber the way he  whispered sweet soft words
i remeber the way he used to smile and point at me to his friends
i remeber beliving that im his one forever

but it turned out it wasnt forever but my mind made me think forever and ever

 

then i saw him with the girl my girl my only girl

i wanted to scream and shout when i got to her

but i just left there and cryed for a long while

 then one day i rembered his lies his horrible lies

 

now i see him on the street with her and i cant even look up from my feet

i just walk on by pretending that im alright

Author's Note

i know its not very good, but i was trying not to cry while writting it, i know it sounds pathetic :( and am sorry its not good :(

Reviews

[Nontani]

Being real is the best part about being an artist. Artistic people are trapped out the outside, but are the luckiest people alive. Instead of being caught up in superficial wants, we're able to question things, observe things and THINK about things. A lot of people can't or don't choose to do those type of things.

This poem is emotional and even if it may not be "good" in your opinion, it reaches out to all of the people in the world who have been in your situation. Do you honestly believe that everyone in the world except you has the perfect relationship? Of course not. Your words are not only helping you let go of your emotions, but comforting others who know what it feels like to be left by someone they really like. That's the important aspect of this poem.

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On a different note, I'd like to point out some spelling errors...

Line 4: "beliving" should be "believing", "im" should be "i'm".
Line 5: "wasnt" should be "wasn't".
Line 8: "cryed" should be "cried".
Line 210: "cant" should be "can't".
Line 11: "im" should be "i'm".

This wasn't bad--just emotional..which, of course, is understandable.

Frozen Angel