February 14th

We all know what day it is

It’s February 14^th,

And in the back of my mind,

I think of all the things that were left behind,

 

I think of the way I felt before,

And of the way I don’t really ever feel that anymore,

It’s not that I’m broken,

I don’t need to be fixed,

I’ve just never again been so transfixed

 

It used to be you,

My world, my life,

Until our love crumbled,

And all fell to strife

 

Now it’s all about me

And frankly I’m a little lost,

Because when it was all about you,

I didn’t really understand the cost

 

I forgot who I was,

Didn’t know what I’d be,

Because when you were the centre of my world,

There was no room left for me

 

I’m still picking up the shards of me,

Even after these two years and a bit,

Moving them around constantly,

To see if they even fit,

 

It’s like I’m following a path,

One that used to be so clear,

But one that now lays in shadow,

Because it isn’t about you anymore, dear

 

I’m meant for more than what I wanted with you,

Though I loved you, and pictured myself happy, it’s true

But looking that far into the future is like being stuck in a trance

Because really, there was too much left up to chance

Reviews

[Trigorin]

You've done a fairly good job with this piece, and I think you've made a very strong use of imagery here. Your topic is, obviously, quite generic, but I think you've managed to breathe in enough of a spark of life that you're able to make it your own. My only criticism is that the piece as a whole is a little long, and I feel like you could have gotten the same message across in a more concise piece, but that's really personal taste. Well done.