Debt

Debt

K.S. 6-14-13

 

 

I am asking for restitution.

Absolution, something worth anything, for all the time I put into nothing.

 

You could instigate a scream in an otherwise silent room just by the way you move.  Your ways are only trickery that deceives me.

 

A fractured sculpture, I stare at it, seeing its complexity.  What once was is strained at the very least.  We both know what caused the ache.

 

Disoriented by the rains percussion we are a broken record repeating the same discussion.  I spin one way, you spin the other direction.  It never ends.

 

People I know are insipid to make me into a documentary entitled “Lonely” and in true form you weren’t there.  Again I scream you never were!  After all I was only your w***e, obsolete, you never wanted anything more.

 

It’s repulsive to learn that I still crave to be under your skin, to want to live within your sickness, its depths, well we won’t get pretentious.  I am far from vindictive.

 

I need to stabilize my smile before they put me on a stretcher, before they can tell how far gone I am.  Such severe denial can’t be good for anyone.

 

I want to feel weightless like the balloons I take pictures of hoping one day they will come specially delivered by you. 

This isn’t true, you are not true.

 

This incident has pierced my now resisted promise of loving you forever.  You were toxic clinging to the atoms that were left of me.  No more begging for scraps and penny’s.

                     

Just give me your entirety; because money won’t fix anything you broke honey.

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Reviews

[Patrick O'Neil]

Great strong opening line "I am asking for restitution." and good conclusion " Just give me your entirety; because money won’t fix anything you broke honey.". I think you touch on a few subjects in a broken relationship with this line"A fractured sculpture, I stare at it, seeing its complexity." Very well written.

[K.S.78]

I was really unsure about the sculpture line so I am glad that it worked for you! :)

[Shay]

The wording and language is strong which makes it more captivating for the reader, nice job

[SyberRose]

A great read indeed...really enjoyed...Rose:)

[Rob Funk]

This is great! "Just give me your entirety; because money won’t fix anything you broke honey". You are outstanding, having just been through a terrible breakup I feel that I can truly empathize with you.

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[Traci]

You have penned my thoughts, my emotions, this past year of my life so beautifully. This poem is so well written, portraying such a deep depth of raw emotions, superb imagery and words that speak to a readers heart through honesty and conviction. Each line has an underlying subject, all in which signifies a broken relationship and can be perceived accordingly. All in all, my new personal favorite of yours 100/100

[K.S.78]

That really made my day thank you and you have no idea how much I needed that! :)

[Traci]

Always my pleasure, you write with such honesty, a reader cannot help but be drawn to your words, your heart, seeing the courage it takes connect with all the emotions you portray. May each day find you surrounded by gentle spirits who help you find balance and comfort. Keep writing, keep releasing, its good for the soul.