Just close your eyes...

The yearning for love is a powerful one...

Just close your eyes

And feel the breeze against your cheek,

Watch the fireflies

Lead you to the answers that you seek,

Don't listen to the lies

That only want to pierce into your soul,

Until the whisper dies

I will lay here, limp as a doll,

And as the sound of sighs

Echoes through the darkening sky,

Let me see your eyes

So I know that our love will never die.

Author's Note

A short, simple poem... but I hope you enjoy it anyway!
Please read and review and tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[Deron Alexis]

O.o only a few lines , yes but you got your point across. You got an emotion across which , may I add is far more important than the point. To give off an effervescence so strong from few words means that the words themselves are powerful and potent and true. It is a skill if anything to write like you have written here most excellently written well captured well done don't mean to ramble on but jeeze you put me in a flying mood... :)

[Katho28]

thank you!!! your words have really set me in a flying mood ;) I'm really glad that emotion came across... I've always tried to place my emotions into my writing.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

very heartfelt and well thought out this peace.
The rhyming was great.
and there was a nice meaning to it.
Great write :)

[mark]

great poem :)
nicely written with a great story :)
keep up the good work.

[William J. Marsh]

Very nice! Short, sweet and dreamy.

[Katho28]

thank you :)

[Antoñyo]

Short and simple, yes, but this piece screams of substance despite feeling so surreal.
That simple "Let me see your eyes," is perfection where it stands.

Absolutely LOVED this one, thanks for sharing.

[Katho28]

Wow, thank you SO much, your words truly touch me... I'm so glad that you read it and loved it :')

[Tom]

A touching poem, simple to read yet packed with emotion and romance ! And of course great rhyme scheme, perhaps my favorite to date !

Quality write once again by yourself !

[Katho28]

thank you so much :) I'm glad you liked it!

[Lydia Shutter]

Spiritual and romantic.....not an easy coupling, but you pulled it off smoothly. Flowing rhyme and good word choice. I felt so serene reading your words. Great work. Lydi**

[Katho28]

thank you so much !!! spiritual and romantic... that was what i was aiming for ;)

[DJ]

A short piece that is well written and flows well. The rhyme works and doesn't seem forced. It sounds better as a read aloud piece I found. Nicely done :)

[Katho28]

thank you so much for your review :) i did find that when i was writing it, i read the poem aloud.. so that's probably why it sounds better as a piece read aloud :)

[DJ]

You're welcome, I enjoyed reading it :)

[Lisa Victoria]

Beautiful....wonderful use of imagery, and although it's short,
it's a portrait of beauty!
Well done:)

Lisa

[Katho28]

thank you :) i was just trying something new :)

[Riding the Rainbow]

Really good poem and full of hope..
Really doing a good job, hun;)

[Katho28]

thank you for your kind words :) i thought that it was time to look positively, maybe there's hope for love after all...