Lie of mirror

I’m looking in the mirror and seeing a reflection,

Is it really me? It’ll be my disaffection!

Because in reality I'm quite different as such,

And my image can't be crude so much.

 

Do I knit the brows so catty?

And bite my lips almost bloody?

Do I grin overly dirtily,

And my squint is too pertly?

 

No, it's untruth, in the mirror not am I,

I don't have an angry smirk, it is a lie!

My gestures don't full of boasting

And don't look like my truth is zero costing!

 

Look here, mirrors can create a lie?

Dishonestly to do this to me or only try!

My kindred spirit, you're the most familiar for me!

Image in mirror's veil is not mine? Tell me!

 

My kindred spirit's staring on reflection fixedly,

His throwing glance on me I'll remember perpetually.

To wait a little time to hear verity, not fiction...

"I'm sorry, but I can't see in you distinctions..."

Author's Note

This one of my poem adapted into English. The most terrible is to use words which doesn't seem to fit context. But I tried to do my best to share those same feelings.

Reviews

[Inspiring Writer]

Ok... So, you means English's not your native lang. that's not a big deal here and i really didn't find any errors in this poem as you did mentioned that English's not your first lang. It's a great write, i enjoyed this write. I liked this poem. It's written in a good way i think. you've put your efforts too much making the piece it's shown here by your words. You can improve yourself if you want more staying in touch of this site and making more pieces.
I enjoyed this write if i say because it's filled with your 'RHYME', i like always 'RHYMING' shorty poems. It's a nice piece/poem you dropped into your words. It's a realistic write... and i must say, Nice flow of ink. An Excellent work you did making this poem. Great job.

[Kattie Karpo]

Thank you for the opinion :)
I'll try to dispose of own uncertainty. By the way, your words inspire me like the rays of the sun in the middle of russian frosty winter. Thanks AWFULLY!

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for posting...:)

[Wolfwind]

Mirrors do lie! Every time I look in one, I see not that which is I, but rather what some random design of genetic providance forced me to exist as! However, no matter the reflection, or refractions of image and light... I know that deep down inside my heart beats just right. For it does not matter the color, shape or size of the shell, the soul is unique, with it's emotions to tell.

You pen a really wonderful poem. I look forward to more of your ink. =)

Aaron - Wolfwind

[zainul]

I appreciate great efforts.
You may make it better over time.

[Kattie Karpo]

Thank you!
I will try to be better :)

[zainul]

Спасибо и вам
Я очень рад читать ваши надежды

[Gretchen Clarke]

For English not being your first language, this is a very good poem! It has a very deep meaning, which is very good for poetry. This poem is going on my Favorites list!
Keep up the great work, and don't worry about translation! (maybe I could help?)

[Kattie Karpo]

Thank you :)
I am glad that I was able to show idea and keep all metaphors and images. It's not so easy. Thank you for your time and for your support. Your opinion will help me to work hard and continue to write and translate.
I'd like to use your suggestion in future. Thank you!

[Gretchen Clarke]

You're welcome!

[Random Peter]

Ok, let me see what you have written,
First, расслабься, здесь много чело�™ек изучают английский язык и иногда допускают ошибки. So, don't worry about the language problem.
Secondly, the rhyme is perfectly balanced and the poem in general is easy-reading.
Thirdly, the concept is bright, the details are included too.
I am not a type of a reviewer who shows the exact mistakes and explain how to fix them, so, sorry for that.
My major advice, as English is not your first language, it is VERY important that you write in English RIGHT AWAY and do NOT translate into it. When you translate, the concept or your main idea or your main sense might dissapear.
Enjoy writing.
Удачи, и при�™ет из Петропа�™ло�™ска-Камчатского, but I live in Vancouver :D

~Peter
96/100

[Kattie Karpo]

Thank you for the first for me review :)
Да, действительно, в итоге обнаруживаешь кучу ошибок, что слегка тяжеловато воспринимается для перфекциониста, так что спасибо за совет расслабиться :D
Don't worth to apologize for anything, I'm just glad that you read my poem. 1
Thank you for advice. I'll try to write English right away to keep my ideas :)
Читала многие поэтические произведения на английском языке и порой приходила к выводу, что не стоит столь усложнять стилистику и играть словами, как пыталась я. Быть может, при создании произведения на английском языке используются более употребительные в быту слова и выражения, а усложненные конструкции, в большом количестве встречающиеся в русском поэтическом мире, лишь портят общую картину? Хотя создавать на английском языке я только учусь, поэтому надеюсь набраться опыта.
I enjoy writing too. I can't live without it.
Спасибо! А я из Ижевска, там же и живу ^^

P.S. Видишь русские слова среди иностранных предложений, и из груди рвется вопль "земляк!":D