Monsters

Like a jagged and rusty blade

It will infect you

Sorrow with a dash of mournful regret

Each wave of heartbreak hits harder than before

Like glass, once broken it will never be the same

Though you'll continue to try to put the pieces together

All that will come is cuts and pricks from the shards of your heart

Even with sliced up hands you won't give up

Band-aids can't fix everything

You can sew, stitch, glue or tape but the end result remains the same

Like the raging fire takes over the forest

It will consume you

Swallow every ounce of your happiness, pride, and self worth

It will lick its fingers and burp with delight

There are only two options

You can either lay down on a sliver platter

Feed the monster that is consuming your soul

And you can allow the infection to spread, paralyzing you

Or you can choose to fight back

Take the pain with pride, and allow your body to heal

Find your antidote

No damage can be undone

Appreciate your unique heart

Do not regret your past, embrace your future

The blade will cut and the infection will sting

Instead of focusing on the pain, focus on the healing

A positive mind will result in positive outcomes

Be your own prince charming, save yourself

Author's Note

I'm completely new at writing in a more formal sense. Please be helpful,not hurtful, but give the most effective criticism you can, thank you.

Reviews

[Cody Williams]

I'm not really a poet. I only have two poems on here that I wrote long ago and neither of them are that good. I'm more of a story writer than a poet...but I'll give it a shot.

You express your emotions very well in this piece. There's no hidden meaning which is why many people don't like poetry...I like that.

As far as the mechanics of writing go, you pretty much got that down. There's nothing major to point out here.

It sounds like a pep talk that I would give someone.

Now, as to why I chose to read this piece. The primary reason I chose to read this is the title "Monsters". I write primarily horror stories (some science fiction and fantasy, but mostly horror). Naturally "Monsters" seemed like the perfect fit:)

Overall you're doing pretty well. Thanks for sharing this piece. I really enjoyed it!

-CW

[Kaylie]

I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback! I can't wait to read more of your writing as well :)

[ForeverUnknown]

This is great! I love the line "all that will come is cuts and pricks from the shards of your heart" awesome job it was a pleasure to read!:)

[casey robbins]

A good read. How you describe the situation you speak of, specifically, is very nice.

[MAC]

love the concept of this one and the layout of it. great title and you deliver the goods to go with it. excellent write

[Adam 'The AD' Wood]

I do like this, it's got a sense of, uplifting yourself, as you take control. It's well constructed, good work.

[Scarlett Brooke]

I really liked the piece. I love the message it sends, we all need to be reminded to think positively. Even in our darkest hours. So thanks for sharing it with us, it's lovely.

[Angel of Chaos]

For being new you express your thoughts "formally" you seem to be doing well. I don't think I can pick one line I like the most.. everything is constructed beautifully.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Ah, how we all adore those monsters that roam free in the landscape of ones mind, well done, good read.