When in Rome

In the throes of the arena

Blood and sand crest the mouth

High up on the podium of virtue

Stood the brave and devout 

 

A pound of flesh for freedom

The whip in dominant hand 

Hysteria coated spears

Entertaining many a man

 

In the name of the Gods

Blood flowed like oil

Lubricating the will to survive

Legends were born

 

Legends were torn

Shredded by lions 

Ended by the thumb

That sits on sadistic throne

 

When in Rome

 

Author's Note

Haven't written anything in ages.. just thought i'd write something to wake up my sleeping creativity.

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

This sounds like a poetic rendition of Spartacus.. I LOVE IT. Sleepy creativity can be rewarding, even if we have no idea where it will take us, its awakening is so rewarding. Willow x

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

such sharp and vivid images floating in my mind, I adore your use of connections and play on words it captures you instantly.

[KeeD]

Gosh you're gorgeous.. thank you for the kind review and interest in my work, appreciate it bunches^^

[Jacquelene Vanessa Moreno]

why Thank you keegan for the compliment :o), I am but a poet and it's wonderful to meet like-minded individuals such as yourself. Your are a very talented writer .

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Its defiantly interesting ill give you that.
I didn't really understand the whole story line though sorry.
Seems pretty deep and meaningful though.
Keep writing :)

[KeeD]

Heyyy ;3 Thank you for reviewing my work, I really do appreciate it. The poem is basically a trip back into time when power, money and status was everything.. where poor farmers, peasants and anyone who opposed the empire was taken as a slave and made to do Romes bidding. Imagine the value of life just resting on one mans thumb ( the emperor of Rome or the dominus ).

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Wow actually has a real depth, and its really moving now that i understand :)
Well written :)

[Matching Socks]

When in Rome...
Can be interpreted in more than one way here but regardless I'd say you've woken the lion within and your creativity is out. Was it ever asleep? Your reviews are always incredibly creative. :)

[ms. barrie]

Amazingly intense, raging imagery your pen blazed in
This write. I feel myself being transferred
Back to these ancient, sadistic times.

Brilliant choice of words & how you used them, in
Each stanza.

My favourite stanzas though are the last three.
Thanks for sharing. :)

[KeeD]

Thank you, wow glad you liked those stanzas. Is there anything I should do to improve the first stanza? Thank you so much for ur review and wow being transferred into those times by my words is a great compliment

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome...i personally wouldn't...the opening stanza (to me anyway),
captures the reader's eye and imagination, with your powerful, unique word choice...
keeping u enthralled to want to read more. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow you sure woke it up alright...
it's easy to be brave and devout when you are the one with the whip sitting on the sadistic throne.

the dominant ones need to find role reversals, and then see what it is like.

[KeeD]

Thank you jacob, love your encouraging reviews