Fractured Youth- Part One

Fractured Youth- Part One

A Story by Kenny Steele
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Meet Pascalle and Dillinger.

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Pascalle Jones was hung over. This was strange, because she didn’t really fall asleep as much as fall into a stupor. She flung her hand out, groping along the edge of her bedside table until she found the bottle of ibuprofen. She threw the lid across the room (if you could call that glorified broom closet a room) and tilted the bottle back into her mouth. There were only three or four pills left in the bottle, and she downed them all before swinging her long legs to the floor. Her father used to ridicule her lanky stature, until she pointed out that she took after him, although she had her mother’s face.


She sat up slowly, taking care to avoid a head rush, and rubbed her eyes vigorously, mildy grossed out by the gunk in her eyelashes. Suddenly, she heard a groaning and felt the mattress shift. She panicked-who the f**k was in her bed? Who was this? What? When?


Then, she really woke up. It was Dillinger.


Dillinger claimed to be her boyfriend, but he never seemed to be around. She looked at him with pure, tender hurt in her big brown eyes. He sure was dumb for someone so smart.


But that’s a story for a different page.


She stood up, yanked her tanktop down from around her ribs and stumbled to the bathroom. She felt like she was about to piss herself.


She sat on the toilet and held her head in her hands, running her fingers along her hairline, trying not to think about her situation, but it was difficult.


It’s hard not to feel disappointed when you’re peeing in a bathroom that’s constantly dirty, no matter how much bleach you use. It’s even worse when your apartment is more of a glorified cellar basement suite. Pascalle shivered. It was getting cold out. Winter was coming.

© 2012 Kenny Steele


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ATG
Pretty good so far. I don't have any advice really considering this is only part one whichs implies that there will be more parts later. It did feel a bit cut off due to it's shortness, but that is not entirely a bad thing. I means I was getting into the story which is a good thing. Overall a good read that makes me want to read more.

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Kenny Steele

8 Years Ago

I like to keep my segments short because I have a tendency to lose the story in itself if I go for t.. read more
ATG

8 Years Ago

Makes sense. No problem on the read, the story is good so far.



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ATG
Pretty good so far. I don't have any advice really considering this is only part one whichs implies that there will be more parts later. It did feel a bit cut off due to it's shortness, but that is not entirely a bad thing. I means I was getting into the story which is a good thing. Overall a good read that makes me want to read more.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kenny Steele

8 Years Ago

I like to keep my segments short because I have a tendency to lose the story in itself if I go for t.. read more
ATG

8 Years Ago

Makes sense. No problem on the read, the story is good so far.

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Added on August 24, 2012
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