To the menistry of mercy

 

 

Dear summer sky that ran out of rain

I write to you to ask you once again

What did I do wrong? As that makes me insane

Whom did I hurt to deserve such a pain?

 

 

What sin did I make to have this ache in chest

What form should I fell to apply this request

What deal I have to make to run out of this s**t

To be better I try and I'm doing all my best

 

 

I wrote to winter sky she wrote back "my dear"

All I can do is to drain your heart from fear

Give you shelter of my sons to wash away your tear

Ask the summer sky maybe your words she'll hear

 

 

So upon her request now I write to you

Hoping you can help me.. No!! wishing that you do

Is it possible to save me as my story you knew

Or am I so guilty that life wants to sue

 

 

Would you do me a favor and mark my file "accept"

Wash away all my sins forgive and forget

Or would I be denied do I deserve what I get

Or take it to another room the last room on the left

Reviews

[silorumeko]

This is truly a work of Art.

[The Winter Grey]

I believe that one of humankind's defining attributes is to implore for mercy, be it from those we love to divine intervention. "What sin did I make to have this ache in chest?" This poem is a powerful portrayal of the desperation one feels at that poignant place of self-blame. Good job.

[Coyote Poetry]

Mercy is the feel when we forgive our self. Then we must forgive our enemies. In the name of Government and poor teachers. We confuse the truth. Hard to find peace in this life. I stood at Death Valley in Iraq. Saw the waste land of vehicles and men laying dead for the profit of men with no conscious or soul. Who will give mercy to the poor men laying dead. Who will forgive Soldiers who killed for Nations with greed and oil as their goal. Mercy for some may never happen. I believe we must go forward and do some good. Maybe we can find calm and peace in the good deeds of a good life. I'm sorry for going on. A powerful poem. You made me think.
Coyote

[Bard Constantine]

I like the creativity of this piece...it creates a frustrated, almost hopeless feeling, but at the same time conjurs strong visuals that make it a delight to read. Nicely done...

[Nyida Strong]

Begging, wishing to be relieved from the pain carried. Hoping beyond hope that those prayers are still heard. Begging for salvation from a Being to bring solace to a tortured soul. Great job.

N. Strong

[Aline S. Iniestra]

Every stanza is begging and pain, but the combination of the sky, the rain, summer, winter makes it very touching and visual. They add more feeling to the constant plea. Very good!! Liked it very much!

[Cherrie Palmer]

very unique, it is a bit sad and lonely, with a deliberate hint to it, I liked it very much