Leaving In Haste

*shurg*

you left me here

consumed by fear

but i wont shed a tear

i wont be here when you get back

and that is definitely a fact

i`ll hurt you so much that it kills

enough to make your mind reel

I hate you and the heart you stole

for my love for you can make anyone feel like a foul

I`ll never give up,on this hate you've inspired

so my time here has expired

This is the last time my feelings on you i`ll waste

and I'm leaving here before i change my mind in haste

Reviews

[Vincent Weathers]

I think you should dig deeper than you have. Who is the person that you may be venting against? What was the background? Try something along the lines of a narrative poem. If you need a model, look at http://www.bartleby.com/198/1.html
This may seem personal but I think it could be even more personal. How were you like before this? Where's the context? Keep asking why.

[lil be me]

this is amazing
i love the rhyme scheme as well