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The Treasure of the Sun

The Treasure of the Sun

A Poem by Kris
"

The land will now never know the Sun's warm glow.

"

The Sun sets to mourn her loss,

to cut her beloved’s wings away,

to save all but one.


He was nothing but a pawn,

never wanted to leave.

Then the time had come

for the battle to be won.


The Moon takes stead,

for the Darkness had engulfed 

the Treasure of the Sun.

© 2012 Kris


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Kris
Constructive criticism welcomed :)

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Very beautiful! I loved your poem. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very beautiful! I like the comparison you have placed in this poem.

97/100

Posted 8 Years Ago


Interesting and unique, I liked it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this twist on the sunset..I see many over the sea from where I live...I do however think that you need to delete one of the 2 AWAYS in the second line

Posted 8 Years Ago


Kris

8 Years Ago

Thank you! It was actually inspired from one of my favorite games.

Yes. I see now. I'll.. read more

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Added on November 19, 2012
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Tags: The Treasure of the Sun, Moon, Darkness, pawn, loss, mourn, Kris

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Hi there! My name is Kris. Any reviews that I get I always read and take into consideration even if I don't reply. If you have any constructive criticism, please do so. I am open to sugges.. more..

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