The Writer

People Always try solving,

Always searching,

The mystery of me -

The person they don't see.

I shroud myself in mystery,

Never letting people see

What's within me,

What's hurting me...

After so many years I walk alone,

Seeing how time has flown...

Time made things to be undone -

Now gone...

I watch the sky

And see the birds fly

(Anywhere, Everywhere)

By their gift, free -

The way I wish to be.

I don't want to go back again

To see my fallen Eden,

A place once my own,

Now with sorrow overflown...

Now I see my old self

Like a book on a shelf -

I was left to dust

Like metal to rust...

I'm standing alone,

My tears turn to stone,

My heart falling apart -

Down, into dust...

At the edge of Insanity I stand,

Looking down to my land -

Leaving it behind.

I shall not walk the world - Blind.

Author's Note

Playing with words is a writers job and you think that saying them isn't hard at all.
I find it very hard to say the words that I write to someone...

Reviews

[Imara]

This is what I consider true poetry(I don't even think I write true poetry), your word play is awesome. Your metaphor, we really get the sense of being alone and heart broken here. I love your hidden messages here and the meaning of the whole poem. OK here I go so prepare to do some reading:
The first three stanza you talk about others how they see you almost as a mystery and how no one really knows the true you and you confess to us that there is some pain that you are hiding. These are all things that other people sense about you but you don't reveal because you don't want them to know.
Stanza 4 and 5 talk about that pain. How time has past but it has only made things worse for you. "Seeing how time has flown.../Time made things to be undone -/Now gone..." The 5 stanza seems to be out of place until we recognize you excellent word play and metaphor. You want to be free from this pain like how the bird is free from the ground.
6+7 stanza you reveal to us (half way much like you do those around you keeping yourself a mystery) that there was something perfect that you lost, you broke, you lost. The first line of the 7h stanza I had trouble deciding whether old referred to your age or to a past you, in the end I decided that you meant a past self considering your next lines. Which I took to meant that you're "eden" which you lost was probably yourself. Stanza 8 is a continuation of that description which we are given at the end of 7.
Finally we come to your grand conclusion, might I just say your last line was amazing, ok so you bring us back to the present. You currently stand on the edge of insanity because of your lost Eden, and you leave that broken world behind to move onto a new one, a new life. You're going to take that lesson you learned and apply it knowing the way the world works, you can now see.

That's what I took it all to mean a poem about moving on from the pain you've been hiding from everyone for so long. How ever as poetic your last line is, and I love it. It's a bit out of the "dark" so to say haha. That metaphor didn't seem to mesh or go with the nature theme that you had going through out the entire poem and makes the meaning of this piece a little fuzzy. Overall awesome I really loved it, just make sure the reader can understand everything because you're writing in a beautiful more classical way, and no everyone reads as deeply into each poem on here as I do. :)

[Wolf]

Thank you, Imara! I like the fact that you can see through metaphors and the lines and see the meaning of the poem. :)
Thank you again for the review! It was a pleasant reading! ^_^

[Imara]

No thank you for writing this, I hope to see more out of you :)

[Wolf]

Well, you are invited to read my previous writings and I'm looking forward in reading what you think of them ^_^ Also, I'm trying to find time to post more and to write more... But you know, finals -_- :P .

[Imara]

Same! I actually only go on here for my study breaks (maybe there's a problem when I consider this my break) finals suck! But they're the only way to get to summer lol

[Annemarie]

This was beautiful, I loved reading it! I can really feel the emotion you poured into it. Very well done!

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Nice rhythmic flow you have here, great concept, you manage to paint a vivid tapestry with such simple words :)

[Trigorin]

You use some very good imagery in this and overall it was nice to read. Some portions felt a little odd and stilted, but on the most part it was very readable. I think the last few stanzas are the best ones. Good work.