Then,he was within..

Then,he was within..

A Poem by poddar kushal

 

Then he was within
( to Kimberly and Bhawana and Janet)
The house used to quiver
whenever a train passed it.
The red eyed lantern became
green alike her face. “Don’t bite
your lips. Don’t bite the lips.”
She was not seeing the face
of the silhouette woman .
So he, still a child in womb
had no memory of a
woman, elderly, eager
to help with the birth. To her
it might be another one.
Still she was eager. A man
barred from the entry was in
his half duty sitting by
his teleprinter. Next train
was at 10 o’ clock. By then
an old man with shaking hands
should cut the cord. Like a drop of
rain he came. Fresh and playful. © 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

© 2008 poddar kushal


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This is lovely...
I sometimes wonder what it would be like to return to the safety of the womb. I pity the father in your poem banned from attending the birth of his son.
For me it was easy to relate to your poem, because I am currently preparing a book about my early childhood, including my birth, so this was very interesting and moving read for me.
Thank you for sending me this read request!
You are getting better and better!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This reminds me of my Mom's house with the train roaring through.
You tend to pull your reader into the scene and once there it is easy to become
engaged in your vivid images.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully done my friend. Full of the excitment of imminent birth portrayed
so insightfully and delightfully here in your poem.

A great read!

~ Helena ~

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this reminds me of my young days I lived beside a railway track every ten minutes a train would pass. You mark well the birth of a child Fresh as a drop of rainThe whole presented in descriptive poetic prose

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An excellent work, full of images and emotions which get deeply into the soul

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is lovely...
I sometimes wonder what it would be like to return to the safety of the womb. I pity the father in your poem banned from attending the birth of his son.
For me it was easy to relate to your poem, because I am currently preparing a book about my early childhood, including my birth, so this was very interesting and moving read for me.
Thank you for sending me this read request!
You are getting better and better!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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poddar kushal
poddar kushal

kolkata, India, India



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life and trying to earn bread made me an advocate. mad at my own stressful self, turned to writing. poems mainly. but, there are several short stories published in my mother toungue 'bengali'.i live i.. more..

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