why?

he is always there for me...
i can tell him anything and he wont freak...
hes like a brother but better!
i love him and he doesn't know it...
these are the reasons for my love...
whether he knows it or not im thinking about the next meeting...
he is mine...
i think...
:)

Reviews

[Kaelyn Shea]

skyy i just realized i wrote this about austin omg!!!

[Jonathan Ballam]

I enjoyed your sense of free verse and wondering in this poem!

Capitalism and grammar should only come once you've learnt to access meaningful images and you are then confident enough to then look at grammar. Rhythm will come if you read enough poetry, and rhyme you should generally leave to the experts (mostly).

Read the great poets (i.e. ones that are published in legimate books) and you'll find your writing start to improve.

Hope this helps :P

[Kaelyn Shea]

and it was one of those how did you know skyyy

[Kaelyn Shea]

haha very funny you beating me up haha o wait you are older than me haha very funny scaggs thanks for the review!!!

[Stephen Scaggs]

Ms. Shea, (I hope that doesn't bother you, lol.)

Thank you for the read request and I think you are still beginning out; but I am a rough critic, lol. First of all, use capitalize spelling and proper grammar as it can distract the reader. Secondly, proper sentence structure like putting spaces in between lines. Like In between the lines, "He is always there for me." and "I can tell him anything and he won't freak." Also, I know that the "..." is a crutch for when you want to create a feel to the poetry, but most readers don't notice it. It actually breaks off focus. Also, rhyming and rhythm are good elements in poetry that help create flow and balance in a poem. POSITIVE NOTES (lol), you write with your heart which is more than I can say about a numerous amount of other writers. Writing with the heart is important. But remember this, it is a balance of the heart and mind in collaboration with the soul that helps form a beautiful poem. You can become an excellent poet, Kaelyn. :P Keep writing, (or I'll beat you up! Or not...) Keep trying. [: 5/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Kyla Keltner]

Brandon? or Stephen?