untitled

i know that i might be crazy
for the feelings you've created inside
i know that im dying
even when i want to stay alive
im tired of having to stop every fight
i wanted you to be there when i ended my life
i dont want to do that now becuase of what it would do to you
i try not to do that stuff it hurts me now too
i see how you were trying to protect me but hey babe it didnt work
i know you were trying to save me babe but instead you got hurt
i still want you to be mine
even if you only are my valentine
whether for a day or for an hour
you always know when i feel sour
im trying not to talk fast
but i dont want to end up last
you tell me nice guys cant win
but i never care because i know your not my kin
i've loved you since we both were five
ever since you tuaght how to dive
i know that i might be crazy but that never mattered to you

Author's Note

i know its cheesy but that was what i was thinkin when i wrote this

Reviews

[Hippy]

its good cheesy aint bad but you did misspell taught in the 2nd to last line

[Kaelyn Shea]

thanks you john

[Eagle Cruagh]

That was real nice cheeze.

It was about what first class poetry is
about. You wrote about the emotion of
the writer and that is what counts.

Good writing !
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Kaelyn Shea]

thanks and no i dint copy you and i didnt know what to call it so any suggestions

[Kyla Keltner]

Youu copied me.. I named one of mine "Untitledd"

[Frederick E. Conkling]

I didn't think it was cheesy, it struck me as sweet in a way. Not a bad job, keep it up.