Lilah

Here is an outlet for a personal issue of mine

Lilah, Lilah,
Oh rest dear, sweet child.
Your delicate soul swings through the air.

Lilah, Lilah
Your passion flows for miles,
Reaching out desperately,
to break through the most of my despair

Dearly forsaken,
Young, sweet soul
Your story had no chance
It is never to be told
forgive me for my action
I did not help to understand
What sorrow it would bring
To never hold your hand

Lilah, Lilah
I never made it clear
How much I truly loved you
to myself Or to my peers

Lilah, Lilah
Forgive me oh, sweet one
You're soul Is searching free
What I did to You
Brings even more pain to me.

Lilah, Lilah,
Oh Rest Dear, sweet Child.

Reviews

[Steve]

I like this style of write. I know now a little mor of what this could be talking about than before.

[Rossen]

beautiful song / poem, so clean and smooth...100/00

[Nish Nish the Fish]

beautiful! so flowy and melodious and sweet, its simple and nice and great! well done! Regret and Guilt are two sickly entities to grasp, especially when they come tied together. However, time, the ultimate cure for everything (hmm...), will come to save the day! i love the name "Lilah" it has a nice ring to it, works well with many other words youve used in your poem. I like the concept of her soul flying freely, and of you asking her soul to touch upon your heart and reconcile the pain you may have inflicted upon it. a very sweet and thought provoking piece. well done!

[Steve]

Very nice! I like poetic style. You are good at this! I could feel the emotion in this one.

[Tate Morgan]

So sad to have to look back on regret it never seems to heal the pains of the past

[smalltownsympathies]

I love how lyrical this sounds to my ears and my eyes. 'Lilah Lilah' I hear someone calling me, or the girl behind me. I hear the sweet sincerity in the line 'your delicate soul swings through the air', and then the motherly narration voice, growing as the stanzas move down, 'forgive me oh, sweet one you're soul is searching free. What I did to you brings even more pain to me'. The emotions grow as the poem grows, and I truly enjoyed this.
PS-I'm one of six kids :)

[Matt Shutler]

I really enjoyed the flow of this poem, especially the consistent slant rhyme. I feel if you would have done true rhyming, it would have been to sing-song. Good job

[roarke]

for me, poems are to distill into a pure, sublime form the elements in life. Senses, emotions, events, epiphanies, etc. To me Kylie, this poem hits all of those. It has a pace and rhythm to it, the stanzas express pure feelings and thoughts and you crafted it well. Thanks for sharing part of you.

[sammyj]

wow I like this a lot