Allow Me...

So close yet far apart...

Allow me to partake in thee glorious confines of thine heart,
Share thine feelings
So I may bask within thine ambiance,
Capability to me enticing
Endless boundries,
Infuriating though necessary.
Allow me to partake in thee glorious confines of thine heart,
Share thine feelings
So I may bask within thine ambiance,
Flamboyant times together
With mates
Allow me thine smile
Even just for one day...
Allow me to partake in thee glorious confines of thine heart,
So I may bask within thine ambiance.
To me you are warm and kind,
Do not believe you are cold and frozen.
Remove such poison!
Allow me to partake in thee glorious confines of thine heart,
So I may bask within thine ambiance.
You know whom you are...

Reviews

[costa siwale]

Allow me to partake in thee glorious confines of thine heart,
So I may bask within thine ambiance.

incredible lines my friend. a well expressed piece, eloquent

[Pryde Foltz]

Allow me to partake in thee glorious confines of thine heart,
So I may bask within thine ambiance.

These lines were beautiful and their repetition added a lot of flow and meaning.

[L4rn13]

Thank you. Your review is much appreciated :)

[Simon Welsh]

Love the archaic language. I'm sure that person will be well aware after reading this :)

[L4rn13]

Thank you :) haha nope he isn't. Do you think there is anything I can do to improve it?

[Simon Welsh]

It's fine as it is :) I'm not a big fan of editing anyway.