2:24am

It is so early in the morning that
sleep is still within reach and yet
the sky burns like a dying campfire.

The promise of a new day is forced on me and
I retreat back into the darkness hoping that
the sanctuary of my dreams will protect me.

Without sleep the day becomes a
marathon of malevolence with each second
that passes by crashes against the shoreline
of my sub-conscious until its unrelenting
screams force me to succumb to the
disappointment of failure once more.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im a night owl to, and i should be in bed by now haha.
I like this piece because i can relate to it, i like the whole meaning to this piece, how sleep is still in reach its not to late, but you just cant sleep, at least i think that's what you were getting at :P
Great write I like this one :)

[Luke Rawlings]

Then go to sleep and stop reading midnight poetry :P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

na i think ill read a lil more :P reading poetry is much better than sleeping :P

[Alana McGuire]

I really enjoy your perspective of being awake at that hour. Being a night owl, myself, I think it can quite beautiful some nights because my thoughts seem less preoccupied and that's when all of my favorite ideas come to me. However, it can also be a really lonely time when my demons seem to see me as most vulnerable.
Sorry for the ramble. Hahah, but really, you have a way with words and a lovely vocabulary to support them. :)

[Luke Rawlings]

Thanks! And I completely agree. The night is when we are too tired to think in our usual muddled sense, so things become much clearer. But we pay for that clarity the following day :P

[Alana McGuire]

Exactly! Great poem :)

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

I absolutely hate nights like that.
I'm very impressed with how this poem was written. It seems almost like literal individual sentences broken up to create each line. Obviously all poems are just fancy sentences broken apart and written to uniquely stand on their own, but this poem seemed to flow so easily into each line that it could be read simply as a few sentences. Nice work, I really love it. It's quite flexible, if that's the right word.

[Luke Rawlings]

A unique review and thank you for this! I am glad you enjoyed it. If you like the style, check out my poem 'Flames'. It is the same structure but a different idea :)

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Your welcome, and I'd love to check out some more of your work :)

[Luke Rawlings]

Thanks! :D

[DCT ponderings]

Yes insomnia has been a day time enemy and yet a late night creative friend. Great poem.

[Luke Rawlings]

That is the essential sum up of this poem haha. Thank you! :D

[marty360]

I experience this on many occasions.
This is wonderfully penned, great job.

[Luke Rawlings]

It happens waaaaay too much haha. Thanks! :D

[Shaun Payton]

Insomnia and a new day isnt always so full of hope like people like to say. The sludgery of having to go on without sleep. I like this piece.

[Luke Rawlings]

Thank you! Exactly the thing I was aiming for :)

[Shaun Payton]

Well it described my recent troubles with sleep and such. And you are welcome:)