Mummy?

Why do you push me away mummy,
Do you not love me anymore?
Mummy, where did you go?
Who is this man; I haven’t seen him before,
Where were you last night mummy?
Not in your bed,
Not at home,
I was worried,
Do you not love daddy?
Is that why you go away?
Will you come home soon?
Mummy?

Reviews

[Dominick]

I notice people don't like to comment poetry this deep. I have one that you may be interested called "On a Cold Mothers Day". I love how you capture a child�s innocents and naivety with simplistic questioning that anyone who remembers childhood or had a child can relate to as far as trying to figure out an adult situation. Very good. I�m delighted I ventured over to view this one.

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

A parent with all the wrong priorities-maybe too young a parent. Very sad indeed to see something like this.

[Ken Simm.]

Why do endings have to come at such an early age? Why do harsh realities have to be learned? Sad but all too common. The plaintiveness of this makes it all the more memorable as a write. Ken.

[.]

Aw, man- truly a heartbreaking read. Tis so sad when a little one has to go thru such experiences. Heartbreakingly beautiful this write.

Mikey

[Sara Searchefield (The ..]

That is so sweet because it's from the innocent perspecitive of an innocent child but you could also tell that the child was truly hurting, not knowing what was really going on in her mother's life...or even if her own mother loved her anymore...

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a wonderfully heartfelt and painful piece. Thank you so much for sharing something this real and painful.

[The Elder Pine]

Such pain in these lines. The prospective of a child is a great one to tell this tale from. I know this feeling all to well.

[Martin L.]

awww This is sad. I'm sure it is hard to go through life without someone close to you.
good job!

[Legion]

:( This hits home a lot. My mom left me and my dad when I was about six months old. Well done.

[FC Writers Club]

touching write. good questions, lack of answers suggesting still no mum. overall good.

[Kevin Andros]

Very deep composition. It's a very delicate point disussed openly with ease. The peice is simple in itself, and yet so complicated. Very deep peice, I say that again. Keep it up! ~KA~