No Way Out!

Days feel like this

From the shadows

They stare

Laughing quietly to themselves

As they watch you turning and turning

To see them looking

Your eyes wonder around and around

Listening, you hear them laughing

You run

Looking over your shoulder

You see them following and whispering

Nothing's wrong you think

They still watch you

Thier watching you laughing

"Freak" they call out "Loser"

Sticks and stones my break my bones

But words will never hurt me...

Not true

You fall and curl into infinity

You disappear

No more jokes

No more laughing

Your dead

Suicide was your choice

Reviews

[Senseless whatever]

This is an OK write. It starts off really strong. You seem to lose your 'steam' or tempo or feeling in the last quarter. I get the ending. Maybe you wanted it to be plain it just seems to destroy an otherwise well written piece.