I�ve been wanting to

What we want, and what we can, do not always match... even in expressing ones emotions.

I´ve been wanting...

to write to you, for quite a long time.
to let you know what has happened in my life.
to share with you what goes through my mind.
to write to you... for a very long time.

I´ve gone over and over... once and again
With thoughts of the words I want to say
Day and night the words flow in my mind
But the fear, anger, sorrow, pain, and confusion has kept them inside.

It has been just when I get the strenght
To write to you and share
That I see that you beat me to it...
And the words you say make me brake.

I know that you care for me
I know that you respect me
I know that you think about me
I know that I am in some ways blessed.

It has been just when I get the courage
To write and let you know that
When you write to me and tell me
Words that I do not want, nor can hear.

Look at me...
I beg...
Look at me.
Really... look.

I know you may say I´m strong
I know I am strong
Still there is just so much
I  can know how to deal with.

The gladiator is strong
Not because he gets out unscratched
The gladiator is strong
Because he gets out alive.

I´ve been in the colliseum
For these past four months
Trust me, I´m fighting,
I´m alive, but really hurt.

 

Where I am at now,
I´m pausing the battle
It's not a sign of giving up
I just cant go on.

 

Healing my wounds,
For strength to come back
For clarity to fill my mind
I write this to you... 

 

I´ve been wanting to write to you,
I´ve been wanting to share with you,
I´ve been wanting to be with you
I´ve been wanting to... but I can´t.

Reviews

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

Again another awesome poem dealing with emotions (can't expect anything less from you at this point :D).

For the technical part (read to the end before you start getting angry or whatever :D), in the first stanza can do without the repetition of: "I�ve been wanting" so it would look like this:
I�ve been wanting to.

to write to you, for quite a long time.
to let you know what has happened in my life.
to share with you what goes through my mind.
to write to you... for a very long time.

the same things for the last stanza. As my teacher said: "When you finish a poem, go back and remove as much words as possible."
But here I don't feel the need for that as it would sound a bit differently than it sound so far. Right not it's more of a beautiful song and therefore I wouldn't even dare to touch it. Stanzas are divided nicely and the repetition of some words is really good, the imagery also nice, well it's a strong poem, maybe your best so far.
The suggestion that I posted here, you may want to try to experiment with it in another poem. So please post up something new soon!

[Sabine]

You write,
For these past four months
Trust me, I�m fighting,
I�m alive, but really hurt.

These lines construct poetry with vigilant counsel. Well written and open. Sabine*

[Patricia]

very nice, emotions that so many go through. Thanks for putting this up. Its always encouraging to read something to which you can relate. Thanks again.

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW ... very very nice indeed ...
Well said and well spoken I must say
A very well written piece :)