The You in Me

Pieces of my imperfection

Lie hopelessly on display

The inner me I've come to know

Breaks a little more each day

The air I breathe is poison

Contaminated by my fear

Each breath I take, my lungs reject

Knowing you're not here

Loneliness invades my crippled mind

And deprives me of my sleep

The night, reserved for reflection

All the memories that I weep

I'm not whole without your smile

And your touch that says I'm real

An empty vessel cracked and worn

Too damaged to ever feel

The you in me gave me life

I was the lost that you had found

I was the one who died today

Though they laid you in the ground

Reviews

[Akshita]

This one's really beautiful and really sad :(

[Whiskurz]

Thanks again my friend.....Whisk

[junaid altaf]

you have beautifully crafted this one.......

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend.....Whisk

[junaid altaf]

you deserve much more than that

[dawn aulis]

So much feeling is poured into this piece. The best poem I have read in a while.

[Whiskurz]

Dawn you honor me my friend......Whisk

[Distant horizons]

A beautiful tribute.

[Whiskurz]

Thanks again my friend.....Whisk

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Impressive write, Whisk.
~pat

[Whiskurz]

Thank you Pat.....Whisk

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Yvw, Whisk.

[Purplerose]

How my heart sank when I read this. I'm so sorry. :(

[Whiskurz]

Thanks again my friend.....Whisk

[Wondering Mind]

Sad but beautifully woven. Welcome to the Café