Golden Mountain

Lyrics I wrote to a tune in my head. Its a kind of mountain gospel song.

When you 

climb that golden mountain

past the valley that we're in

If you should see my daddy 

Tell'm we remember him

World's getting colder

and we're all growing older

but soon we'll climb that mountain

and be together again

Golden Mountain

I here you calling

Golden Mountain

I see the light

World's getting colder

and we're all growing older

but good ol' golden mountain 

You're still burnin' bright

If you 

pass a deep dark hole

on your way up to the top

and you hear some voices

calling you to stop

You just pass'em by

Don't listen to their lie

They're just trying to talk you

into a fiery drop

Golden Mountain

I here you calling

Golden Mountain

I see the light

I'll just pass'em by

Won't listen to their lie

and good ol' golden mountain 

You're still burnin' bright

As you

climb that golden mountain

and take it mile by mile

You may meet a stranger

with a winnin' smile

He may offer you some gold

or all that you behold

But you just keep on walking

though he's talking all the while

Golden Mountain

I here you calling

Golden Mountain

I see the light

He may offer me some gold

or all that I behold

but, good ol' golden mountain 

You're still burnin' bright

Golden Mountain

I here you calling

Golden Mountain

I see the light

I'll just pass'em by

Won't listen to their lie

and good ol' golden mountain 

You're still burnin' bright

Golden Mountain

I here you calling

Golden Mountain

I see the light

World's getting colder

and we're all growing older

but good ol' golden mountain 

You're still burnin' bright

Good ol' golden mountain

You're my guiding light!

Author's Note

What do you think? I know it's hard to judge lyrics without music, and I'm not a good enough musician to make the music, but if anyone is really interested I might be willing to record myself singing it (I'm not a great singer though). Also, I know the 'him' in the first part is an 'almost' rhyme but I couldn't find a way around it and it kind of feels right...

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Hello, Sir! This is great! I like lyrical pieces like this. I think I'll be your avid reader from now on. I told you we have similarities. I also write songs. Here are links to my pieces (you don't need to review, just giving you as samples) :

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/hearmymind/1285101/

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/hearmymind/1136924/

I'm not also a good singer and keyboard player but it really helps because some viewers can suggest and recommend something for improvement (I'm very much open for constructive criticisms).