Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[Josefin]

Beautiful and grasping.

[dare to fall?]

Great peice. Very well written and composed. Job well done, i love it!

Even though, I'm typically not a poetry type of person, this particular piece seemed to grab and hold my attention, mesmerizing me with the bare emotions that are laced throughout it. I also liked how you were able to appeal to a darker side of the spectrum, while near the end adding a bit of light and hope instead of leaving it as just a very depressing, or very optimistic piece, which is what usually turns me off of poetry. Though there were some lines that I felt were cut a bit short, it didn't take away from the wonderful entirety of the poem. You are a very talented writer and I hope you never stop writing!

[Fragilebrokendreams]

powerful and interesting. Very eye grabbing love it.

[LateNightLady]

I really like the style and the rhythm felt smooth although I feel as though it forced you to use very broad words in order to fit into the form. This is coming from a fan of open verse, mind you.

I almost wanted to see more of these images you're creating. I kept asking "how?" How was the pleasure filled? How do you feel the pain?

Ball and Chain give us the impression of not only a prisoner ( ...restless behind bars) but also alludes to that of marriage, of a romance that drags us down instead of lifting.

It is very lovely :) Thank you for posting

[Levi Cross]

My favorite line has to be 'A Soul lost between then and now' I find it amazing how quickly 'now' becomes 'then', and how quickly 'then' can fade into a dreamlike memory.

[Gene]

This is cool =) I like the lines "I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear"

[Kayla Alma Roman]

Amazing

[Allison]

I love it, very clever with the between lines. Wonderful Writer

[Steven Daveluy]

I LOVE this poem, I did read it more than twice and I can relate. Thr rhyme scheme doesn't bother me at all, I think it flows nicely.