100 Monkeys

Sometimes I feel like a monkey banging at the keys. Sometimes I feel like Shakespeare mastering his quill. Either way, words scatter across the page.

100 Monkeys

 

 

100 monkeys

Manning their machines.

Typing out Shakespeare

Or something more obscene.

Key strokes painting

Pictures out of words.

Waxing so poetic

Or spewing thoughts absurd.

 

Philosophical pondering

Or pandering to posturing.

Prose of importance

Or parables in pretense.

 

100 monkeys

Creating quite a feat.

Mastering Shakespeare,

Chaucer, Poe, and Keats.

Simian words of wisdom,

Thoughts for us to read.

When will we learn their lessons

That we fail to heed?

 

Legion

10May08

Author's Note

May add or change this later. Not sure about that last stanza. What do you think?

Reviews

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

"Philosophical pondering

Or pandering to posturing.

Prose of importance

Or parables in pretense."

What a powerful statement my friend. This work warrants a read over and over to soak it all in......Excellent poetry indeed. A prospect for a song as well........

Peace,

Bill

[Kat Williams]

Simian words of wisdom...


I laughed my a*s off at this one...nice write

[Angel's Lady]

When will we learn their lessons
That we fail to heed?

I quite loved the whole darn thing! So true, by the way! Masses that amass, masters that master, crowds that crowd...Great write. Good job!

Key strokes painting
Pictures out of words.

These two lines were my actual favorites, as that is what I like to do most! Paint with words! Awesome writing you have presented here! LOVE IT! And I'm capturing it to put in my Favorites!

[Crash]

I love the idea of the poem. And I find it incredibly worded.
I believe your right about the last stanza. Its still quite good, but the last two lines don't quite flow in my oppinion. Still a lovely piece.

[O!]

The say monkeys are smarter than us humans.....now i know why u wanna call urself a monkey?! hehehe...or should i say...u u u

:-P

cant believe u read me...hahaha

x,
O!

[ANNA]

Great concept.. The style was good and I like the name: 100 Monkeys
Very good..and the words you use made it all the better
Thanks for sharing this with me

Anna

[Lily1111]

This was really quite good! Excellent flow and you know how I love to read my beloved rhymes. Which by the way were quite magnificent and sang like a choir and not a soloist. It was just a delighful little poem and I love how you incorporated the poets. Well I am certainly one of the 100 little monkeys that you speak of, at least I hope I am.

As to the last line, I don't know. I think it is fine the way it is. Whenever I feel that way, it tends to gnaw at me and then one day, boom, it comes to me. I am not sure what to suggest for that.

Maybe:

When will we learn their lessons
Can we satiate our need?

Play around with it. The poem - not the monkeys.

Nice write!

[Y.F.]

I've always enjoyed the "monkey writing Shakespeare" concept, though I think it was a thousand monkeys, not 100 (maybe even a few thousand).
Interesting concept, very good flow, interesting rhyming scheme (did you mean for the middle one not to rhyme?), and yes, I did like the last stanza.
Thank you for these words, from one monkey to another. :)

[Master Morality]

I love the rhymeing in this. I can just kinda get a beat going to it - it's great.

[R J Askew]

Sheesh a hundred monkeys would be a big step up from where I am right now. About 12 days working on 'DA PROJEKT' just gone in da bin. You couldn't lend me a couple of monkeys could you? Actually a silverback gorilla would be better. I need him to beat one thought into me KEEP IT SIMPLE, KEEP IT SIMPLE, KEEP IT SIMPLE...da pubic don't get layered complexity and ya can't brezzily brush off a lack of coherence as masterly frivolity. Not if you is a no mark bum like I is. What's the hourly rate for a silverback? I will pay $5 for an hour's thrasing. $10 if he'll only break my fingers with the keyboard.