six word story

free verse poem, in six words.

with you

my (he)art is alive.

Author's Note

any feedback and critique is welcome

Reviews

[Pete]

very clever and creative with limited words to work with. good job ... :)

[Ted Kniffen]

Well done, Leviari. Your six words conveyed the double meaning quite well. I trust this had the desired effect on the subject in question.

A good write.

[Leviari]

thank you for stopping by! :)

[kitty]

You bring love and romance to this page. Do continue to share this skill on the site. Thank you for being here.

[Leviari]

many thanks!

[goldenscar__]

where all the art is... the heart
short & neat!

[Leviari]

thank you very much!

[Scott]

I like that. Clever combination of he, art, and heart. You can draw multiple meanings from that alone. Very cool!

[Leviari]

thank you !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like these condensed versions...it's a talent to put so much into six words. not only his heart alive, but his art as well....she is his muse.
j.

[Leviari]

thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words. You made the reader understand your thoughts in six words. You did well.
Coyote

[Leviari]

thank you :)

[bob26]

I really like this. so many meanings edged at by so few words. The entanglement of a person and their creations can almost be a love affair or relationship in its own right. brilliant!!

[Leviari]

I'm very happy you got the reference. Thank you!

[Siddhartha Chatterjee]

Loved the play between heart and art. Loved the fact that merely with a few words, you meant the world. Beautiful.

[Leviari]

Thank you!!