The Sky

This is a poem to kind of illustrate my mood. I hope it is enjoyed!

Her eyes were the sky
A soft blue with delicate clouds outlining it
Concealing the pain that swelled behind them
Every smooth line was a curve in the sky
The emotions never blossomed through
The sky staying a pure blue
Mystified, people tested the skies calmness
Purposely arousing storms yet the sky never cracked
Though its unblemished paleness grew dim
Turning slowly into a dingy gray as the pain grew
It consumed her
Begging to be seen
To be released
Yet she didn't let her sky crack
It grew more challenging with each passing day
With each step
Each word
Each blink
Until the sky broke
Sharply shattering and crippling
It coughed out salty distorted tears
They oozed and bled from the sky
Streaking down
Gray
Bright clashing thunder erupting with each swollen tear
Until there was nothing
Nothing but a hollow darkness

Author's Note

Please review! I would really like feedback and advise on this!

Reviews

[Olive042]

This is a nice poem. I like how you made the sky into personification.

[Queen Apocalypse]

Thank you! It means a lot!

[wordman]

loved the poem,it is very sad ! but it is believable ,happens every day

[Queen Apocalypse]

Thank you!

[Relic]

This is an excellent display of poetry. My first reading of your poems and I enjoyed it immensely. You've got plenty of talent with a pen.

I like. :)

[Queen Apocalypse]

Oh my goodness! Thank you so much!!
It means a lot!