Shoot

"No, please don't shoot." she pleaded him. But he ignored her and laughed cruelly. She saw him taking it out of his pocket. She don't want to see it coming, so she covered her face with her hands and waited for the click.

"Done" said her little brother grinning at the photo in the camera, he had taken of his sister having acne on her face.

Author's Note

Ignore the grammar.

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

Wow yaar... what a comic ... u made me smile and laugh... thank u...
well, the aim of a writer is to bring a certain feeling to the reader.. may it be laugh, cry, smile... anything....
but it should come...only then you'll know that your writing is worthy....
your first attempt is highly commendable... I'm with you... carry on writing whatever you like. Don't care of grammar, it will improve with time and will effort. .. Just keep writing and msg me if need any help...
wonderful job!!!
keep it up .......
Anindita : )

[Lalita]

Thank u Ani, for such a motivating comment.

[Anindita Janhabee]

My pleasure dear...

[Great Aunt Astri]

OH Lalita, This is so funny I laughed out loud.

[Mrinalini R]

Highly Witty!! Makes for a snappy read.

[Lalita]

Thank you :)

[matrixmark]

Made me smile this piece - nice twister of a very short story.

Kudos to you.

Mark.

[Lalita]

Thank you :)

[bunnie]

Well written lolly. .. It looks so serious in the beginning but funny in the end. M. Well written

[Lalita]

Thanks panda :)

[Nathan Ashlock]

Wow. It seems so serious for the longest time except for at the end. Love it!

[Lalita]

Haha...
Thank you :)

[Hebe]

incredibly misleading, very successfully done :)

[Lalita]

Thank you! Glad you liked it. :)

[Valentine]

Nothing wrong with your English, I could see this happening. Valentine

[Lalita]

Thank you ma'am for your review :)

[Swati Nayak]

nice and funny plot Lalita...

[Lalita]

Thank you Swati :)

[M P Ramesh]

Lalitha,

Extreme situation takes place in literature with hard ,unfamiliar and awkward styles. The expression being the culmination of understanding is the primary motive as far as the reader is concerned. Once it can be achieved in any manner , then the purpose is served. As above.


Excellent attempt .............


carry on............

the way of presentation and crisp phonetics with audacity of the writer to adopt new diction are taken with THANKS


After all who cares GRAMMAR? The writers can swim without rudders , with bare hands.....be confident


M P Ramesh

[Lalita]

Thank you sir! I am glad you liked it.