Mindless

I think I'm going to break. 

What you've done to me is monstrous.

What I've done to you is punishable by death. 

I think I want to drown.

What we've done is unfathomable.

What we haven't done is unbreakable.

I think we've done something wrong.

What they've done is prejudice.

What they haven't done is look. 

There's two doors in front of us,

and nothing in between.

I think I love you.

I think that's okay. 

Is that okay?

Author's Note

I am indeed a homosexual, I identify as a male and yet am a female and dating a female, so I struggle day to day with people who don't want to make a second look at me.

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Your work is always good, I enjoyed reading this and as far as those people
who won't give you a second look for whatever reason, they need to check
themselves, because the last time I checked only God can judge us!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[my.lost.valentines_]

I like the last part.
"I think I love you.

I think that's okay.

Is that okay?"
you are a good writer.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem.
"I think I love you.
I think that's okay.
Is that okay?"
I like the above words. The repetition made the words feel real. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I loved this so much. It has a very strong voice and discloses a vivid picture of shame, being shamed, being ashamed. And amplifying those feelings into something so gruesome as the worst crime of all. But in reality, feeling what you are feeling is not a crime and nothing to be ashamed of. You are who you are and you love who you love.

[the writer of woe]

So is this supposed to be about homosexuality? I'm not getting the overall theme, but I'm getting the message of someone who has choices, yet is dealt something they have no control over. It's a pretty good poem in my opinion. Great word choice, and great figurative language. Overall a nice job.

[ANTO]

It doesnt seem to gel with the title - I think its far from mind-less - I think its mind-ful
Perhaps too full a mind - perhaps a splitting mind but not an empty one by any measure.
I like the duality and self recrimaination - to me, it indicates conscientiousness.
This trait can lead to guilt i we let it but its a positivity in its own right (not the guilt lol).

I think this is okay. Is THAT okay?

:))

[dan]

Wow. All types of negative actions (unfathomable, punishable by death, drown) ends with a heartfelt expression of love, or is it not okay? Such dichotomy in a piece serves to draw the reader in with the sharp contrasts, leaving the reader to reach their own conclusion. Is it okay? Or not? What of the earlier mentioned negatives? Allowing the reader to draw their own conclusion makes them feel involved, thus piquing their interest even more. I like your style, LimnoH! And your sexual identity does not color the meaning or style at all. take care...dan

[stansg]

Good work. Th world is indeed prejudiced, we should stop thinking about them and live our life to the fullest. I liked it,God bless you.