Whisper

It is fear that holds me in it's final stage
Disease pulsing with the tempo of my heart
Throughout my body your pain is swimming
Monsters of corruption here to tear me apart

Finally, the time is near to except death as it comes
No longer aware of the world that lives around me
Surviving on the only morphine left that you supply me
You stroke my hair and softly whisper "darling, come home..."

My eyes well with the will I can't find to fight myself free
This spell is beautiful, but it's all too captivating for me
I will not lay here with your memory stained on my heart
Because this dream is all a lie, and it is here I will not die

Wandering slowly through a world of darkness
Holding onto the only sweet hope I once contained
Ill, I try to find the patience to write my last will
Slowly, I can't help to notice that this is no longer a dream
Pushing through the walls of my ignorance and insanity
Eager to find the light on the other side of this dark realm
Reaching for your hand on the other end, I know it will be there

Author's Note

I liked the Fallen Hero wrote the name of his poem in his work, so I wanted to try it... :)

This is a lyrical poem...!

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

"Finally, the time is near to except death as it comes." I think you meant: accept death, not except.

"My eyes well with the will I can't find to fight myself free
This spell is beautiful, but it's all too captivating for me"
-Amazing two lines. Loved it.

"Slowly, I can't help to notice that this is no longer a dream
Pushing through the walls of my ignorance and insanity
Eager to find the light on the other side of this dark realm"

-Oh, how I can relate.Excellent poem, inside out. Really enjoyed every word. You are wise for such a young lady. Keep going!

[Sweets]

This is so creative!
I just loved it!!!!!!!!!!
Such a great poem :)
and the last stanza is AWESOMEE
++++ favzz =3

[Misty Blue Eyes]

thats a great idea. i love the lay out of the poem very nice

[MissWordSmith]

There was a sense of understanding and wisdom here. The creativity just leaps off the page, assaulting the reader.
The last line was a final hope... so simply and yet so beautifully put!
Definitely original, - which is always the BEST kind of writing. and humble.
a perfect combination.

"My eyes well with the will I can't find to fight myself free
This spell is beautiful, but it's all too captivating for me"

Can't stop pondering upon those ^ lines for some reason! best two lines in the poem in my opinion.

[D S Rollins]

This is amazing. and I love how you made a little acrostic poem at the end with the word 'whisper.' It's so emotive, (I'm such a mushy so and so--emotion always moves me) the language and the imagery.. thank you so much for sharing!

[SOUL LESS]

Creativity...that's it. Took a distressingly cliche theme and made it readable. Have you heard the term...unwilling rhyme. It's a killer. You do it sometimes and it's quite jarring. Second, you lack strength. Nearly every modern poet does so that needs no explaining.
Work on it.:)
7.5/10

[Kelley]

I like how you turned it into a Acrostic poem at the end. This was amazing Iris and I want to thank you for sharing.

Kelley

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

A very well written poem which has a darkness which really appeals to me I loved the message at the end such a great concept and structurally sound great read i look forward to viewing more of your work

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Really well done, I enjoyed it a lot - very strong indeed. Keep up the good work~

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nicely done...powerful piece of writing..like the message in the end..